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everything was just terrible. the only wishes that made sense were 1) tony stark intelligents 2)creation quirk from momo after that basic common sense is non existent at this point. I don't even want explain the other messed up things about this novel cause it's really even comedy novels they some sense but this.
Incoherent and prosaic. Skrrrrrrrrrrrrkdkdkskksnznzmskakkamamzmzmzmkzksmzmzkzkzmsmskskskhbhbbhvdcvgbyuunniinbhcexwzzqwtvunimpllpomjttvexwsxeybunjmunn
I was not impressed with this story. aside from grammatical errors which I won't go over there is a real lack of true character building right out the gate you go through several time skips only stopping to cover something unimportant or just add in some marvel concept like Jarvis or danger room. Then there is the poorly chosen wishes that steals ideas from various fiction with no originality or creativity except the last one which was just pathetic and proves that there was no intention to develop characters and their relationships its much easier just to magic those in. Characters are killed off but doesn't matter cause they were personality equivalents to white noise. truth is this story could maybe be good all it needs to do is get a new name, start over, be creative this time, and slow down developing the characters in a meaningful way, oh and to figuratively burn this one so readers arnt tarnished with its presence.
Haven’t started reading it but just had to leave a review on how awesome the cover art is👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾
It was very hard for me to read 5 chapters.. Hopefully I won't ever come across this again.. I hope the one who wrote this is a kid, or else I pity his IQ
i could somehow understand the story but my brain hurts reading this... dont know why he has to use a fucking tech when he have enel's fruit he can fucking create and armor for that ****... and why bother doing stark like thing in fucking dc? for ****'s sake... although the story is a little good it still hurts my brain too many mistakes that i see (maybe only me) andmaybe you don't even read your reader's suggestions... im stopping at this chapter only coming back if this got re write or more chapter or something won't hurt my brain while reading this...
Doesn’t fully understand the powers his own OC has the story is very meh with many points where the OC could have prevented something’s that happen overall really dumb the story should just not have so many misconceptions also the grammar makes it really hard to understand
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Horrible grammar, Horrible character development, unbelievably bad set up, could only have been written by a child.👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎
Wow. Been a while since I've gotten sick from grammar disease. Doesnt feel very good. Oops my hand slipped heres 2 stars hopefully that's enough
Wow, time skip and throws you into crap. An iron man interface? Whatever that is, out of nowhere. Poor nonexistent explanations for everything else as well, jarvis, teleporter, danger room, etc. You already cut out relationship development with the 5th wish and now cutting out tech development... Wow, 1out of 5.
I would have preferred reading a novel where your MC is reincarnated into Darksied than this but it's not like I didnt end up liking it. You got your first mixed review... Try better next time.
Any romance for mc or harem ?🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔
Really good chapter. Continue writing and update more please.Really good chapter. Continue writing and update more please.Really good chapter. Continue writing and update more please.
I expected more from this and I was sadly disappointed. This isn't the worst DC fan fic by far but it's by no means the best,if anything this is a little below average. Truly disappointed.
Really good story. Keep it up and please keep updating.Really good story. Keep it up and please keep updating.Really good story. Keep it up and please keep updating.Really good story. Keep it up and please keep updating.
Story is great, but I would like for him to develop more as an anti-hero not just on Earth but other planets. Save a world and have it come to his rescue later.
Good story. I hope you write more. Good story. I hope you write more. Good story. I hope you write more. Good story. I hope you write more. Good story. I hope you write more.
I love the world background and the use of different characters in the chapters it makes me happy to see more marvel fanfics keep it up bro your very talented
Your Story needs a rewrite and a lot of proof reading. Don’t get me wrong, It has some definite potential and I like the concept you’re going for, however that can only keep my attention for so long. The ungodly amount of grammar errors made it extremely difficult to follow, and quite frankly had left me extremely frustrated after every chapter. An example of this would be in Chapter 12. “After checking her state for a wield, he took the drive sit and flew the jet.” Yea...I too was blown away at the lack of proof reading, if any. At this point I would like to point out that other than grammar the story itself has major pacing issues. I feel the author is writing less for plot and more to imagine himself in his MC’s shoes. In my own words this is a “hey bro ya know what would be cool” kind of story where you are just saying what you would do with no detail on the effort or practical ways of going about doing it. Overall if this was rewritten I would maybe continue but for now I have to take a step back from this novel. This is in no way meant to disrespect or hate, but to offer constructive feedback! — M.C_Darwin
It's getting really on my nerves how the wife of the mc always is more powerful than him he is also always getting nerfed and just a weak little ***** otherwise great fan fiction like really is that his reincarnation story or the adventures of his op wife while he'll stay at home looking after the kids like come on mate you had a great idea but really ****ed it up
Are you dropping this its been so long now also is Gine gonna rape him since she's sycho now it'd be pretty funny and +18 also why not uni beam her in the face.
their are many problems with this fanfic one of the most important being the fact that the story honestly doesn't even need Gina if anything she gets in the way of the mc completely harnessing the capabilities having a brain like tony stark I mean he literally made time travel possible and that is not even in the list of top 20 things hes done with his incredibly powerful brain.
There's not much going on other than training and it's chapter 12 already. The super op powers n stuff just make it worse... Whilst I'm sure this is great for some people, it's not my cup of tea
like that of the present using spiritual stones? like that of the present using spiritual stones? like that of the present using spiritual stones?
It's not difficult for me to follow the story. Your understanding and use of English should improve over time. The characters, places, events etc... are all working to entertain me. Thank you for giving something I can enjoy.
Bad grammar, cant sau anything about stability of updating because i gave up on the first chapter so i will give full stars, story dev. is a mehh, charater is good and world is good. Overall, pls improve on the grammar, its a major point when writing anything, even if you are not native english speaker surely you could do this better if you just write the chapters in word and copy them to webnovel.
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Tiết lộ Spoiler everything was just terrible. the only wishes that made sense were 1) tony stark intelligents 2)creation quirk from momo after that basic common sense is non existent at this point. I don't even want explain the other messed up things about this novel cause it's really even comedy novels they some sense but this.
Incoherent and prosaic. Skrrrrrrrrrrrrkdkdkskksnznzmskakkamamzmzmzmkzksmzmzkzkzmsmskskskhbhbbhvdcvgbyuunniinbhcexwzzqwtvunimpllpomjttvexwsxeybunjmunn
I was not impressed with this story. aside from grammatical errors which I won't go over there is a real lack of true character building right out the gate you go through several time skips only stopping to cover something unimportant or just add in some marvel concept like Jarvis or danger room. Then there is the poorly chosen wishes that steals ideas from various fiction with no originality or creativity except the last one which was just pathetic and proves that there was no intention to develop characters and their relationships its much easier just to magic those in. Characters are killed off but doesn't matter cause they were personality equivalents to white noise. truth is this story could maybe be good all it needs to do is get a new name, start over, be creative this time, and slow down developing the characters in a meaningful way, oh and to figuratively burn this one so readers arnt tarnished with its presence.
Haven’t started reading it but just had to leave a review on how awesome the cover art is👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾
It was very hard for me to read 5 chapters.. Hopefully I won't ever come across this again.. I hope the one who wrote this is a kid, or else I pity his IQ
i could somehow understand the story but my brain hurts reading this... dont know why he has to use a fucking tech when he have enel's fruit he can fucking create and armor for that ****... and why bother doing stark like thing in fucking dc? for ****'s sake... although the story is a little good it still hurts my brain too many mistakes that i see (maybe only me) andmaybe you don't even read your reader's suggestions... im stopping at this chapter only coming back if this got re write or more chapter or something won't hurt my brain while reading this...
Doesn’t fully understand the powers his own OC has the story is very meh with many points where the OC could have prevented something’s that happen overall really dumb the story should just not have so many misconceptions also the grammar makes it really hard to understand
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Horrible grammar, Horrible character development, unbelievably bad set up, could only have been written by a child.👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎
Wow. Been a while since I've gotten sick from grammar disease. Doesnt feel very good. Oops my hand slipped heres 2 stars hopefully that's enough
Wow, time skip and throws you into crap. An iron man interface? Whatever that is, out of nowhere. Poor nonexistent explanations for everything else as well, jarvis, teleporter, danger room, etc. You already cut out relationship development with the 5th wish and now cutting out tech development... Wow, 1out of 5.
I would have preferred reading a novel where your MC is reincarnated into Darksied than this but it's not like I didnt end up liking it. You got your first mixed review... Try better next time.
Any romance for mc or harem ?🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔
Really good chapter. Continue writing and update more please.Really good chapter. Continue writing and update more please.Really good chapter. Continue writing and update more please.
I expected more from this and I was sadly disappointed. This isn't the worst DC fan fic by far but it's by no means the best,if anything this is a little below average. Truly disappointed.
Really good story. Keep it up and please keep updating.Really good story. Keep it up and please keep updating.Really good story. Keep it up and please keep updating.Really good story. Keep it up and please keep updating.
Story is great, but I would like for him to develop more as an anti-hero not just on Earth but other planets. Save a world and have it come to his rescue later.
Good story. I hope you write more. Good story. I hope you write more. Good story. I hope you write more. Good story. I hope you write more. Good story. I hope you write more.
I love the world background and the use of different characters in the chapters it makes me happy to see more marvel fanfics keep it up bro your very talented
Your Story needs a rewrite and a lot of proof reading. Don’t get me wrong, It has some definite potential and I like the concept you’re going for, however that can only keep my attention for so long. The ungodly amount of grammar errors made it extremely difficult to follow, and quite frankly had left me extremely frustrated after every chapter. An example of this would be in Chapter 12. “After checking her state for a wield, he took the drive sit and flew the jet.” Yea...I too was blown away at the lack of proof reading, if any. At this point I would like to point out that other than grammar the story itself has major pacing issues. I feel the author is writing less for plot and more to imagine himself in his MC’s shoes. In my own words this is a “hey bro ya know what would be cool” kind of story where you are just saying what you would do with no detail on the effort or practical ways of going about doing it. Overall if this was rewritten I would maybe continue but for now I have to take a step back from this novel. This is in no way meant to disrespect or hate, but to offer constructive feedback! — M.C_Darwin
It's getting really on my nerves how the wife of the mc always is more powerful than him he is also always getting nerfed and just a weak little ***** otherwise great fan fiction like really is that his reincarnation story or the adventures of his op wife while he'll stay at home looking after the kids like come on mate you had a great idea but really ****ed it up
Are you dropping this its been so long now also is Gine gonna rape him since she's sycho now it'd be pretty funny and +18 also why not uni beam her in the face.
their are many problems with this fanfic one of the most important being the fact that the story honestly doesn't even need Gina if anything she gets in the way of the mc completely harnessing the capabilities having a brain like tony stark I mean he literally made time travel possible and that is not even in the list of top 20 things hes done with his incredibly powerful brain.
There's not much going on other than training and it's chapter 12 already. The super op powers n stuff just make it worse... Whilst I'm sure this is great for some people, it's not my cup of tea
like that of the present using spiritual stones? like that of the present using spiritual stones? like that of the present using spiritual stones?
It's not difficult for me to follow the story. Your understanding and use of English should improve over time. The characters, places, events etc... are all working to entertain me. Thank you for giving something I can enjoy.
Bad grammar, cant sau anything about stability of updating because i gave up on the first chapter so i will give full stars, story dev. is a mehh, charater is good and world is good. Overall, pls improve on the grammar, its a major point when writing anything, even if you are not native english speaker surely you could do this better if you just write the chapters in word and copy them to webnovel.
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