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This story so far is one of the best I have read. It is too bad that you have either discontinued or put it on hiatus. It makes sense as well as flows very well.
The first three chapters are great! Hope you do not drop the novel. I have high expectations of it. ..................................................................................
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I am liking the story an the way that it's progressing, until now the combination of jutsus and magic dont seems to becoming unnatural and too OP. think its a nice reading.
well i believe this book can be great you already have the main idea of combining magic and ninjutsu.... he also has to make it what it was originally intended for when whats his face six sage guy passed his teachings down instead of killing and what not, now you just gotta figure out the if, when, and who he is going to share his knowledge with.. since that zetsu came obviously that thing is going to be helping someone or something so most probably he is going to need help and maybe a lot depends on u but.... a lot of people knowing may make it harder on you to keep up with all that info..... anyways you are the author and these are just some ideas that may help you narrow down how you want your own story to go and like i said this story has already started of pretty damn good so hope you continue writing it is one of the better fan-fics i've read so keep up the good work...
a very good start !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! a very good start !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
the story is nice ive only read to chapter 3 quality for writing is nice story dev is nice same with character design world background is nice as well worth a read
A rather average story. It is a mix of HP, Naruto, and transmigration, however, with Zetsu as an additional villain, manipulative Dumbledore and Voldemort from canon, it is becoming slightly overcrowded. The grammar isn't terrible, but some interpunction errors were driving me crazy - specifically, putting a comma after 'but', instead of before. For some time, it was mostly a good read, when the MC was having his training montage, using a library of multiple chakra techniques in HP world. However, when the canon started, too many paragraphs were taken literally from canon.
This story so far is one of the best I have read. It is too bad that you have either discontinued or put it on hiatus. It makes sense as well as flows very well.
The first three chapters are great! Hope you do not drop the novel. I have high expectations of it. ..................................................................................
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I am liking the story an the way that it's progressing, until now the combination of jutsus and magic dont seems to becoming unnatural and too OP. think its a nice reading.
well i believe this book can be great you already have the main idea of combining magic and ninjutsu.... he also has to make it what it was originally intended for when whats his face six sage guy passed his teachings down instead of killing and what not, now you just gotta figure out the if, when, and who he is going to share his knowledge with.. since that zetsu came obviously that thing is going to be helping someone or something so most probably he is going to need help and maybe a lot depends on u but.... a lot of people knowing may make it harder on you to keep up with all that info..... anyways you are the author and these are just some ideas that may help you narrow down how you want your own story to go and like i said this story has already started of pretty damn good so hope you continue writing it is one of the better fan-fics i've read so keep up the good work...
a very good start !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! a very good start !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
the story is nice ive only read to chapter 3 quality for writing is nice story dev is nice same with character design world background is nice as well worth a read
A rather average story. It is a mix of HP, Naruto, and transmigration, however, with Zetsu as an additional villain, manipulative Dumbledore and Voldemort from canon, it is becoming slightly overcrowded. The grammar isn't terrible, but some interpunction errors were driving me crazy - specifically, putting a comma after 'but', instead of before. For some time, it was mostly a good read, when the MC was having his training montage, using a library of multiple chakra techniques in HP world. However, when the canon started, too many paragraphs were taken literally from canon.