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A Serenade for the Innocent

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Tác giả: blairehawthorne

4.75 (39 số lượng người đọc)

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A series of short stories about the horrors of the material world, the fear of the unknown, and a general glimpse of the fragility of the human psyche.

Witness the tales of several people as they face adversaries beyond human comprehension. Where does the monster truly lies: inside or outside?

If two worlds collide, both will reign in each other's chaos. Do you place your trust in your own understanding of the world? Welcome dear visitor, welcome to a spectacle you never know of.

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"And then I saw it.

Taking his phone is not a wise decision after all.

Even my jaw dropped and my brows furrowed after seeing it. I understand. The hasty beating of my heart fills my body with unfathomable chill because I completely understand now."
- a short excerpt from Vol. 1, A Serenade for the Innocent

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# ROMANCE

# R18

# COMEDY

# MYSTERY

# SUPERPOWERS

# SCARY

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Chryiss

Writing Quality: Above Average Update Stability: Great Story Development: Above Average Character Design: Average World Background: Above Average Good grammar, few typos and errors overall. It might be due to you rewriting the first story though. While the writing is technically/grammatically sound, and there’s a relatively good range of vocabulary used, the prose and style feels lacking. But it lacks not because there’s now enough “stuff,” but because there’s too much. Surprisingly, for once, it feels like there’s too much self-introspection in the first person narrative. This connects a bit with the character design portion. The first story describes Margaux from her point of view too much. There’s paragraphs of how she views herself as above everyone else and being annoyed that she’s interested in a guy like John/being beaten in “popularity” and “fame” compared to her Student President Status. Even though I find her character generally unlikable, I don’t detract just because she’s not my cup of tea. In fact, there are moments when she’s quite relatable. In regards to writing her, I just simply feel like a lot could be cut about her without losing anything essential; in fact, it would make those details about her less redundant and more impactful overall. There’s also another aspect of the writing that feels off (not off as in wrong, but in that something’s missing which could elevate it to Great). The suspense and horror is generally well done, but again, due to over-focusing, like with her character, it also feels dragged out when it could be condensed to deliver a sharp more frightening impact. In short, the timing is off due to the length of the writing descriptions. More specially on character design. I was on the fence about average or above average. I settled on the former because I realized it’s about design, not depiction. The latter I touched upon in the above section in relation to writing style, while the former is about the strength, originality, and memorableness of the characters. Margaux has a strong, clear character, but it’s too generic. This might be due to the excess of details describing her and her every thought, but her whole character boils down to haughty af. I say this a little jokingly, lightheartedly. Most don’t delve into and focus on such characters, so that view was refreshing. However, the inner struggle she had wasn’t strong enough, which is why I deem her a relatively weak character. She falls too squarely into one category when it would’ve nice to give her more dimension, perhaps elaborate more on her conflicted feelings when John died. That’s the part I looked most forward too, what kind of psychological or emotional struggle would she have when he died after “meddling” with him. But instead of this being dwelled upon in the length that the previous descriptions of her character were, this crucial bit, the climax really, was lacking. This also includes how she went “crazy” when the “monster” chasing John came after her. I would’ve loved more on that. And touching lightly on John, I found him a bit more interesting, he seemed more promising with more potential, but instead he was just diminished to a simple scared prey. I understand this is the horror part, of being reduced to such a state, but it made him ultimately forgetful. Onto the plot and world background specifically, here you shined the most. It’s not common to see horror genres on here, so it was cool to see how went about creating suspense and mystery. With that said, as mentioned before, the “timing was lacking” to make the scariness even more chilling and the “monsters” more intriguing. In conclusion, I think you’re a good writer with good ideas, they just need to be refined to the next level by cutting some parts harshly out while diving more into others. The horror feelings and depictions are promising, but needs quite a bit of polishing. While I mostly focused on the first story in writing this review, I also read-

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masterofthehouse

I am SO torn! +1, Porcelain is back which is GREAT! -1, it is also the shallowest and most unnecesarrily goriest, AND I MEAN GORRIEST, volume so far. +1, HOWEVER, it is also, by far, the best written volume BY FAR! -1, and its also the most umm... raunchy volume??? hahahaha! its soooo sexy in ALL the wrong reasons which is exaclty what I should expect from a horror story wahaha +1, author has been writing more frequently nowadays YEESSSS! -1, but not everyday WHICH IS OK BTW HUHUHU I'M NOT PREASSURING YOOUUUU! I'll still give it 5 star anyway LOL I just really wanna make these words heard somehow even if no one would listen waahwaahWAAAHH!

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LV 5

HwaEr

Fascinating. Intense Spooky. Dark. And i love it... This is the kind of story(ies) that once you start reading,you ask for more. Not putting pressure to the author,but ,keep it up!!!😊😊😊

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