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Просто не понимаю твой гг просто из долбаящер. И еще долбаящер пришел из современного мира ведет, как проститутка всем говоря свой секреты. Просто не логично, просто из современного человека ничего книги не читал чтоли. И правильно что гг шалаву убили. Автор то что пишите про гг простая трата сюжеты ужасны, не говоря свои не поврежденных воспоминаний.
I love the character design and all, but I can't seem to get into the story. I don't think I'll keep reading it, but who knows. Updates are not the most stable, and there are a bunch of grammar mistakes. With so many, it's hard for the story to flow, for me at least. I have a couple of complaints. 1. Ranking system is too complicated in terms of name. 2. Organs. I think you should put the name of the actual organ, because I have no idea what is what 3. You deviate from the plotline too much. I get that it may be necessary for the story, but it really doesn't let the story continue. It just gets interrupted and it gets hard to get into it. Maybe put a bit of the plot and then a shorter version of the side character story. Once in a while is okay, but you do it too many times. 4. Grammar is iffy. 5. Goes really fast.
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Honestly this story is very good but the author is not consistent with the releases and it kinda makes you not want to read any of the stories 🤷🏽♂️🤷🏽♂️🤷🏽♂️!!!!!!!!!
The world, story and characters are great and quiet original for wuxia novel. Many culture are present among African, Chinese, Japanese and westerner. But the writing is really bad. Repititions and typing errors are common among other annoying things and sometimes the writing feels of, the characters know things they shouldn't or you feel you missed something that wasn't told. Honestly, I can't recommend this novel due to the writing that gets on my never. But if you are lenient on it, it's an excellent story with good characters.
Original i read here that was refreshing and new, glad to see that its back to being updated here. I dont use webnovel that much but i had to say, epic work bro. As an african i appreciate the authenticity and entertainment factor in this
😭泣的玫瑰静悄悄话语文📖籍男子汉大丈夫人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢都会被他妈的👶😮哈哈爱人爱人们俩月底之前说了一句两句😮哈哈爱情片片片片片枫叶情绪川千世纪律部🚪了么😘么哒么哒么哒么哒么哒
Tiết lộ Spoiler Thanks for the update and for the record I will be there at like noon and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the
Thanks so much for the update and the keys and the other two are all set for the update on the status of the order I will be ready 😊😃😊😁😁😃😃😂😂😂😂😂😁😁😁😂😁😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😁😂😂😂😂😂😁fur the the rest of the week and I will be there for the interview on and on about how I was going to get the keys and the kids are all set thanks the time to you to see if there was this taken to the hospital to see if they are
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Ok, so usually if a novel is going to have inconsistencies it is noticeable at the start. That is not the case with this novel. Minor Spoilers Ahead (not enough to ruin anything, but enough to give you an idea of the story) This novel started off explaining how Taku, the MC, is reincarnated and how he is a genius that "conquered" Earth in his previous life and now intends to conquer this new world. At first, he is overwhelmed by the crazy feats the villagers can do, but that is reasonable since even a genius can be amazed at the ability to jump across a village in a single leap. Taku gets his special ability, that all members of the race have, and leaves the village. He does some really cool stuff then goes into training and the novel looks awesome at this point, ch10-15. Next the author starts world building. He shows a few different perspectives from around the world and each of these side perspectives is that of someone with a special characteristic, so I expect that they will each play an important role in the future. I enjoyed each one of them and expect that the characters would be very entertaining in the future. Overall, so far, the character design is incredible and world building is off to a great start, ch25-30. Now, the training is over (obviously the MC completed the training). Taku now goes off to do a mission with another trainee. A bit more side perspectives... Back to mission. Here is where the first inconsistency really shows up and the story starts its downward spiral. It was stated when Taku was about to start training that he would get 1-on-1 weapons, spear and short-sword, training, for special reasons. Yet, when he goes on this mission he fights with spears and is just swinging it around with no idea how to use it. This is also where you start noticing an inconsistency with the power levels. But that is just a couple small inconsistencies and can be overlooked, ch35. Then we get another side character perspective. Starting to become a bit bothersome, but hey, we all love when good world-building finally comes together so move on. Now is when we start noticing that Taku isn't quite the genius he was made out to be and a bit more inconsistency. Taku is a team leader and is on his way, one week out, to meet his team mid-mission, so what does he decide to do? Do some training on the way, quite irresponsible in my opinion. So he meets up with his team and guess what, HE WAS 2 WEEKS LATE! So mid-mission, he decided to take a 2 week detour. So either the author was inconsistent in his writing or Taku is a terrible team leader, ch45. Then Taku does a couple more foolish things, the power levels are incredibly inconsistent, and the story is in a nose-dive. I expect it to crash hard, with no surivors, very soon. I REALLY liked this novel and lots of potential at the start, but unfortunately I don't expect it to save itself and expect it to lose readers until the author drops it midway. Author, if you are reading this, I recommend going back to the training and start rewriting. Just fix the inconsistencies and make Taku at least a decent leader or make him at least a semi-soloer. Especially fix the romance thing you have going on. Either let them **** and Taku get it out of his system so he can focus on his goals (my recommendation), or rewrite it out and level off the romance so that it happens at a better time. He states repeatedly that he is a full grown man, but you make him act like a teenager when it comes to his emotions. And fix/better define the power levels. You show that he can barely fight a level 1 beast, but then a few chapters later he is insta-killing level two beasts and fighting level 4s. And if not then start over with a new novel, I think you have a lot of potential as a writer. Don't get me wrong, I really enjoyed the novel at the start and really hope that it can be rewritten somewhat to allow for the world-building and character building, excluding the MC, to show off their potential.
This author cant seem to continue his stories. Look on royalroad he drops his stories. This started out great but then the multiple pov got confusing af so I dropped it and also author has discontinued this soo reading this wont be worth ur time.
Excellent history so far. Nothing to criticize but man i need more chapters, i give you my SS i hope you enjoy it. What i can't think is that there's much people reading this novel. saludos desde México
Meh i dont like it.....................................................................................................................................................................................
great story . great work great author. but you should fix some grammar issues. take a little bit of time . and reread the chapters you are making so that the grammar would be perfect. but overall the novel is great. keep up the good work ,
Love the story so far keep it coming I be waiting for the next chapter. .................................................... ....................................................................................................
Ever wonder why in almost all xianxia novels there seems to be only one ethnic group or skin color amongst humans (A.K.A everybody in the universe is a Chinese and has a Chinese name)? Really nigga? I mean where are dem Browns, dem Blacks? Also how come all hot chicks are described as white, fair-skinned, like jade? Where them ebony chicks? Well in this novel, there are Whites, Yellows (japanese-like) and Blacks. That's right, you read correctly, Blacks! And the Blacks got the strongest empire and the other empires are pitiful in comparison. How come you ask? Well, literally cuz of Black power. Seriously, Blacks have a special power.
Good plot but story can be dull during world building phase but overall solid and different just want more updates. P.S Recommend stockpiling chapters due to slow release rate
So far so good.................................................................................................................................. .......................................
Refreshing story this is the kind of novel i was looking for many characters and the mc is not op and has to train just like others and it is a welcome change from the regular chinese view of cultivation and breaking through levels.Unique world and many countries and the M looks like he is african i am waiting for the new upadates ...... Keep up the good work theonionjunktion
if you’re like me and have little patients then don’t read this the author continues to dragon what his abilities is, the design of the world, and the mc a coward living around barbarians so he is in a constant fear and as a mc he is not even in control of his own life, but what makes that worse is from what little we know off the world his race seems to be the most powerful and there ruled by royalty instead of sects and we all know the deal of nobles 🤦🏼♂️🤦🏼♂️ just image them in a barbaric tribal group, so there you have it firce to join an army with low survival, and even survival means slavery to the royalty 🙄 so im setting here like i barely read a dozen chapters but i can already guess roughly were the authors going which is annoying. BUT i do want to point out that i actually like the mc’s personality because it makes him more rational and cautious but in a group of barbarians it just makes him seem like a weak minded bitXh and it’s the most annoying thing so far
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An interesting new world, looking forward to exploring it more. Keep it up. An interesting new world, looking forward to exploring it more. Keep it up.
Wonderful novel with great characters, awesome world building, an interesting and unique protagonist and thrilling fights! I highly recommend this novel to everyone
pros: -fresh martial world element different from chinese mainstream -completely new jobs/profession and level -many new concept that will be interesting if developed futher cons: - too fast paced world building, lead to a confusing stories - poor character development - author tried to create a comedy mc but failed to deliver. - relationships between character is not logical (with a brief introduction mc became very familiar with other character)
Great plot Neeed more chapters Powers are amazing Wanna read more Hope author can write quickly Need some lover or gf for the main one. Wannna know if there is only one world
Hey guys author here. I love martial arts fantasy a war fantasy, but i thought about bringing something new to the mix. Hope u enjoy my work. Criticism and comments are always welcome. I have other works online such as Titan's Throne and Solitary Sword Sovereign each with millions of views so check em out :)
Awesome story telling. Feels different from most other stories because of the Gutu empire! Long live the Gutu empire. For real: the journey the character undertakes is similar. For example -> the MC is a coward when he's young, but that characteristic isn't really seen anymore because he's strong. Just like most Xuanhua's.
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Yo TheOnionJunction I have jumped ship from Wattpad.guys don't mind my rating because I have not even read the book yet but I am ready. Are you?!
What is the release rate of this novel? If its gonna be slow I d better not read it now and wait for it to accumulate a bit of content. Excellent novel though. Well thought out. Loved it. Expecting more.
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Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact avarohm_review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Просто не понимаю твой гг просто из долбаящер. И еще долбаящер пришел из современного мира ведет, как проститутка всем говоря свой секреты. Просто не логично, просто из современного человека ничего книги не читал чтоли. И правильно что гг шалаву убили. Автор то что пишите про гг простая трата сюжеты ужасны, не говоря свои не поврежденных воспоминаний.
I love the character design and all, but I can't seem to get into the story. I don't think I'll keep reading it, but who knows. Updates are not the most stable, and there are a bunch of grammar mistakes. With so many, it's hard for the story to flow, for me at least. I have a couple of complaints. 1. Ranking system is too complicated in terms of name. 2. Organs. I think you should put the name of the actual organ, because I have no idea what is what 3. You deviate from the plotline too much. I get that it may be necessary for the story, but it really doesn't let the story continue. It just gets interrupted and it gets hard to get into it. Maybe put a bit of the plot and then a shorter version of the side character story. Once in a while is okay, but you do it too many times. 4. Grammar is iffy. 5. Goes really fast.
Tiết lộ Spoiler Honestly this story is very good but the author is not consistent with the releases and it kinda makes you not want to read any of the stories 🤷🏽♂️🤷🏽♂️🤷🏽♂️!!!!!!!!!
The world, story and characters are great and quiet original for wuxia novel. Many culture are present among African, Chinese, Japanese and westerner. But the writing is really bad. Repititions and typing errors are common among other annoying things and sometimes the writing feels of, the characters know things they shouldn't or you feel you missed something that wasn't told. Honestly, I can't recommend this novel due to the writing that gets on my never. But if you are lenient on it, it's an excellent story with good characters.
Original i read here that was refreshing and new, glad to see that its back to being updated here. I dont use webnovel that much but i had to say, epic work bro. As an african i appreciate the authenticity and entertainment factor in this
😭泣的玫瑰静悄悄话语文📖籍男子汉大丈夫人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢人呢都会被他妈的👶😮哈哈爱人爱人们俩月底之前说了一句两句😮哈哈爱情片片片片片枫叶情绪川千世纪律部🚪了么😘么哒么哒么哒么哒么哒
Tiết lộ Spoiler Thanks for the update and for the record I will be there at like noon and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the keys and the
Thanks so much for the update and the keys and the other two are all set for the update on the status of the order I will be ready 😊😃😊😁😁😃😃😂😂😂😂😂😁😁😁😂😁😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😁😂😂😂😂😂😁fur the the rest of the week and I will be there for the interview on and on about how I was going to get the keys and the kids are all set thanks the time to you to see if there was this taken to the hospital to see if they are
Tiết lộ Spoiler Ok, so usually if a novel is going to have inconsistencies it is noticeable at the start. That is not the case with this novel. Minor Spoilers Ahead (not enough to ruin anything, but enough to give you an idea of the story) This novel started off explaining how Taku, the MC, is reincarnated and how he is a genius that "conquered" Earth in his previous life and now intends to conquer this new world. At first, he is overwhelmed by the crazy feats the villagers can do, but that is reasonable since even a genius can be amazed at the ability to jump across a village in a single leap. Taku gets his special ability, that all members of the race have, and leaves the village. He does some really cool stuff then goes into training and the novel looks awesome at this point, ch10-15. Next the author starts world building. He shows a few different perspectives from around the world and each of these side perspectives is that of someone with a special characteristic, so I expect that they will each play an important role in the future. I enjoyed each one of them and expect that the characters would be very entertaining in the future. Overall, so far, the character design is incredible and world building is off to a great start, ch25-30. Now, the training is over (obviously the MC completed the training). Taku now goes off to do a mission with another trainee. A bit more side perspectives... Back to mission. Here is where the first inconsistency really shows up and the story starts its downward spiral. It was stated when Taku was about to start training that he would get 1-on-1 weapons, spear and short-sword, training, for special reasons. Yet, when he goes on this mission he fights with spears and is just swinging it around with no idea how to use it. This is also where you start noticing an inconsistency with the power levels. But that is just a couple small inconsistencies and can be overlooked, ch35. Then we get another side character perspective. Starting to become a bit bothersome, but hey, we all love when good world-building finally comes together so move on. Now is when we start noticing that Taku isn't quite the genius he was made out to be and a bit more inconsistency. Taku is a team leader and is on his way, one week out, to meet his team mid-mission, so what does he decide to do? Do some training on the way, quite irresponsible in my opinion. So he meets up with his team and guess what, HE WAS 2 WEEKS LATE! So mid-mission, he decided to take a 2 week detour. So either the author was inconsistent in his writing or Taku is a terrible team leader, ch45. Then Taku does a couple more foolish things, the power levels are incredibly inconsistent, and the story is in a nose-dive. I expect it to crash hard, with no surivors, very soon. I REALLY liked this novel and lots of potential at the start, but unfortunately I don't expect it to save itself and expect it to lose readers until the author drops it midway. Author, if you are reading this, I recommend going back to the training and start rewriting. Just fix the inconsistencies and make Taku at least a decent leader or make him at least a semi-soloer. Especially fix the romance thing you have going on. Either let them **** and Taku get it out of his system so he can focus on his goals (my recommendation), or rewrite it out and level off the romance so that it happens at a better time. He states repeatedly that he is a full grown man, but you make him act like a teenager when it comes to his emotions. And fix/better define the power levels. You show that he can barely fight a level 1 beast, but then a few chapters later he is insta-killing level two beasts and fighting level 4s. And if not then start over with a new novel, I think you have a lot of potential as a writer. Don't get me wrong, I really enjoyed the novel at the start and really hope that it can be rewritten somewhat to allow for the world-building and character building, excluding the MC, to show off their potential.
This author cant seem to continue his stories. Look on royalroad he drops his stories. This started out great but then the multiple pov got confusing af so I dropped it and also author has discontinued this soo reading this wont be worth ur time.
Excellent history so far. Nothing to criticize but man i need more chapters, i give you my SS i hope you enjoy it. What i can't think is that there's much people reading this novel. saludos desde México
Meh i dont like it.....................................................................................................................................................................................
great story . great work great author. but you should fix some grammar issues. take a little bit of time . and reread the chapters you are making so that the grammar would be perfect. but overall the novel is great. keep up the good work ,
Love the story so far keep it coming I be waiting for the next chapter. .................................................... ....................................................................................................
Ever wonder why in almost all xianxia novels there seems to be only one ethnic group or skin color amongst humans (A.K.A everybody in the universe is a Chinese and has a Chinese name)? Really nigga? I mean where are dem Browns, dem Blacks? Also how come all hot chicks are described as white, fair-skinned, like jade? Where them ebony chicks? Well in this novel, there are Whites, Yellows (japanese-like) and Blacks. That's right, you read correctly, Blacks! And the Blacks got the strongest empire and the other empires are pitiful in comparison. How come you ask? Well, literally cuz of Black power. Seriously, Blacks have a special power.
Good plot but story can be dull during world building phase but overall solid and different just want more updates. P.S Recommend stockpiling chapters due to slow release rate
So far so good.................................................................................................................................. .......................................
Refreshing story this is the kind of novel i was looking for many characters and the mc is not op and has to train just like others and it is a welcome change from the regular chinese view of cultivation and breaking through levels.Unique world and many countries and the M looks like he is african i am waiting for the new upadates ...... Keep up the good work theonionjunktion
if you’re like me and have little patients then don’t read this the author continues to dragon what his abilities is, the design of the world, and the mc a coward living around barbarians so he is in a constant fear and as a mc he is not even in control of his own life, but what makes that worse is from what little we know off the world his race seems to be the most powerful and there ruled by royalty instead of sects and we all know the deal of nobles 🤦🏼♂️🤦🏼♂️ just image them in a barbaric tribal group, so there you have it firce to join an army with low survival, and even survival means slavery to the royalty 🙄 so im setting here like i barely read a dozen chapters but i can already guess roughly were the authors going which is annoying. BUT i do want to point out that i actually like the mc’s personality because it makes him more rational and cautious but in a group of barbarians it just makes him seem like a weak minded bitXh and it’s the most annoying thing so far
Tiết lộ Spoiler Its good its good its good its good its good its good its good its good its good its good its good its good its good its good itd good its good its good its good its good its good its good its good
Tiết lộ Spoiler An interesting new world, looking forward to exploring it more. Keep it up. An interesting new world, looking forward to exploring it more. Keep it up.
Wonderful novel with great characters, awesome world building, an interesting and unique protagonist and thrilling fights! I highly recommend this novel to everyone
pros: -fresh martial world element different from chinese mainstream -completely new jobs/profession and level -many new concept that will be interesting if developed futher cons: - too fast paced world building, lead to a confusing stories - poor character development - author tried to create a comedy mc but failed to deliver. - relationships between character is not logical (with a brief introduction mc became very familiar with other character)
Great plot Neeed more chapters Powers are amazing Wanna read more Hope author can write quickly Need some lover or gf for the main one. Wannna know if there is only one world
Hey guys author here. I love martial arts fantasy a war fantasy, but i thought about bringing something new to the mix. Hope u enjoy my work. Criticism and comments are always welcome. I have other works online such as Titan's Throne and Solitary Sword Sovereign each with millions of views so check em out :)
Awesome story telling. Feels different from most other stories because of the Gutu empire! Long live the Gutu empire. For real: the journey the character undertakes is similar. For example -> the MC is a coward when he's young, but that characteristic isn't really seen anymore because he's strong. Just like most Xuanhua's.
Tiết lộ Spoiler Yo TheOnionJunction I have jumped ship from Wattpad.guys don't mind my rating because I have not even read the book yet but I am ready. Are you?!
What is the release rate of this novel? If its gonna be slow I d better not read it now and wait for it to accumulate a bit of content. Excellent novel though. Well thought out. Loved it. Expecting more.
Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!