*Re-writing* NARUTO: DUAL KAMUI in a cultivation world

LV 5

memberberry

the story is a mess, 11 chapters and several "cool" powers. mc meets a stranger in the woods and abracadabra we are best friends. I wasn't going to waste my time any further, but since I didn't see any reviews written by an adult, I decided to do other readers like me a favor.

LV 4

StuckInTheInternet

Ngl, I wasn't expecting much from this fic. I thought it would be just another 'Mc with the sharingan in another world' story, which we've all read a thousand times before, but I was pleasantly surprised by this story. It doesn't necessarily feel like the mc is going to get op without actually putting the work in. The Mc is playful without being childish, and so far I'm liking the system. There are a few typos here and there, but it's just typos, not grammatical errors, so it's easy to look past. The story is still in the early stages as of Chapter 36 (I don't think more than a month has passed, I could be wrong) so I can't wait to continue reading the mc's journey in this world. BTW, I'm still emotional from the first arc 🤧😢😭.

LV 1

WoahBuddy

I read a few chapters. I like the whole idea of Kamui powers in a cultivation novel. The progression had a nice flow in each chapter. I also like the system MC has because it feels sentient. This story has The Gamer vibes, which is interesting. I think the biggest issue for this story would be the writing quality. I saw a few simple mistakes in spelling, punctuation, and extending sentences. Most scenes feel forced and uneventful. Dialogue seems to be rushed and monotonous. Overall, this isn't that good to me, but I think most people would like this story. I'll give this a 3.5/5.

LV 10

Daoist_Dan

A slow but fun enough story. It has a good concept. A chakra user in a cultivation world. Also it had a fun twist I didn't see coming. One that showed the mc isn't a generic robot mc who can quickly move on from anything. The world and bestiary are interesting too. The only problem I had with it was some moments I noticed didn't add entertainment value. Plus they didn't spiral into anything interesting. Adding summarization to the writer's toolbox would be a good thing imo.

LV 5

one_punch_op

My thoughts are that, this brings a lot of new things and keep in mind that this might look like a mess to some but author is bringing new plot rather than reincarnating mc in naruto world which is too overdone at this point and seeing something new is fresh and good. Good luck author

LV 4

GalahadAlter

it's good, I like it ...................

LV 1

greedy_reader17

Good so far

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Prisx_ktmu

The writing quality is not perfect but it is already good. I love how the mc acted, although I didn't like that he trusted a stranger like Tom (didn't wanna spoil it) so easily. His power comes from different anime and it opened a lot of opportunities for him, very nice. The story of him in the forest with Tom excites me. And I am curious about the continuation of this book. I hope you don't drop this. But, if you do.. Could you atleast make an ending before dropping it? Like, the mc suddenly die or something. I read a book that have the mc dying cuz the author decided to drop the book xD it was hilarious. Anyways, keep it going author! Hope you keep improving!

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Fellow_Daoist_John

me parece bastante interesante y entretenida, estoy esperando los proximos capitulos, y espero que explore diversos poderes de anime del sistema y no solo de naruto.

LV 3

Rgendamushrooms123

Hello guys, if you like my story then a review will be fantastic and i don't have much else to say except the story is only beginning and the plot twist for the first arc is coming so stay tuned▼・ᴥ・▼

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tris_krits

GOOD!!!