The heat of the sun hit so bad that the only reason.. (Remove it is)
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his daughter is "no longer" alive.
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comfortably "seated".
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...these people locked in a staring "contest" as different thoughts swirl in their minds. ( contest, space betn different and thoughts and "swirl" in place of swirls.)
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keep up the good work.
all out instead of all put.
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Her bites weren't restrained and the sounds from her mouth weren't concealed ... (restrained would be better and weren't in place of wasn't
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Countless people die everyday, so no matter how close cultivators get they are always ... (Remove of and add "so")
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her breath "unwillingly" speeds up a bit.
"You must hate me right now..", Empress Orverlia says calmly with her gentle fingertips touch washing through her daughter's skin and clothes while making them completely clean from top to bottom. Despite being on the receiving end of the gentle and motherly touch of a saint, the other party just keeps calmly staring back at her mother though her breath unwilling speeds up a bit.
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Though it's hard to truly tell as he was being stared at by random people from different directions.
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