Certainly! I think, somehow i failed to balance the moral scene . now i dont want to give much spoiler here but he died saving the girl he liked. I think i turned it a mood spoiler by adding more details rather than simple death scenes for second life- that's what he is complaining about. btw,for anyone reading i am open for more critics- if anyone finds out here. lastly, i would urge to not conclude everything early. thanks..
its a metaphor which means pale or fair complexion.i didnt wanted to be coined as racist- white supremacist as my book is literally on values of equality. so picked it up from a novel which i felt neutral and rhyming.
A few months ago, Riya, a Bengali beauty, had joined Elacademy as a junior history teacher. While her striking appearance: graceful figure, flawless jade-like skin, and bright eyes, drew attention, it was her personality that truly captivated him, catching him completely off guard.
History · Jeet_1993
stopping here, will read later..
Alfonso's expression shifted slightly, showing brief seriousness at the presence of the guards, but his smile quickly returned. "It's fine, HAHA! You can tag along," he said with a hearty laugh.
War · Indian_Painter
he knows about minutes. i didnt knew clock was invented?
Alfonso's smile wavered for a moment but quickly brightened again. "Oh, come on! It's not every day I get to see my little brother in action. Surely you can spare a few minutes?"
War · Indian_Painter
check out my sample in aux volume. u will have a better idea.
Forced to find work, he started tutoring to make ends meet. What began as a temporary solution became a full-time career. Soon he settled as an educator at Elacademy, teaching civil service aspirants.
History · Jeet_1993
thanks for the gift. i like your enthusiasm. gestures like this really gives me joy.😊👍
i apologise for the bad experience, when i wrote i thought i had a picture ofmc dieing in hand of some beautiful and didnt paid attention to the girl that much. i promise i will try to give an alternative ending to her story as well in later chapters.
I apologise for the bad taste. also i dont delete any review. reviews are hard to get and i am glad u shared ur feedback though i cant do much to it. i am a new writer and through ur comment i would like to ask other readers also to give their honest feedbacks regardless of stars, i would like to know more of my mistakes and would strive harder to improve myself. hope u still continue. thanks.
"There have been notable movements of military forces in the Cochin-controlled territories. Large quantities of steel and weapons are being procured. The spies within the Nayaka's network have confirmed these purchases, indicating that preparations for significant conflict are underway."
War · Indian_Painter
hope he reads.
Empire Ascension: The Rise of the Fated One
History · Jeet_1993