Cosmic_Yellow

Think of the Protagonist as a kind of 'Mahoraga'(JJK). The Mahoraga has the POTENTIAL to be the strongest being in JJK, but it needs to go through various situations to adapt and grow with it, before finally becoming the strongest. The protagonist is the same. He has the potential that guarantees he will become the strongest sooner or later, but he still needs time to grow before finally reaching his peak. A better example would be to compare him to other Gods. Gods are born powerful but in exchange, they master limited concepts. The Protagonist wasn't born powerful but in exchange, he was born with unlimited potential. He's stronger than he thinks, by the way (still, he's not absurdly powerful YET). He just doesn't know it because he lacks combat experience or inserted knowledge in his mind about how strong he is; he has to learn gradually.

The idea is that, [Spiral] will be the first to marry Vesper. There won't be a ceremony or anything like that because [Spiral] doesn't have a body, but she will have a genuine confirmation from Vesper instead of a 'lost' response like [Flame] had (since neither side made the deal with the intention of getting married; it just ended up that way due to a poor choice of words from both sides).

Thank you for the suggestions, I'll try to use them soon! Some of the things you mentioned seem extremely helpful to me, so I'm going to test them out right away. This little conversation ended up making me even more excited to write... especially now that I have some extra paths to try to polish my beginner writing. Thanks ( •◡-)~!

Thank you for the explanation! And honestly? As I read your message, I began to understand what you meant, and don't worry, you expressed yourself well enough. Some of the suggestions I feel are kind of... too common? I think that's the right way to put it, but anyway. 20% of the suggestions are too common, while the rest are really interesting and, honestly, much better prepared than what I ended up writing. In a way, I'm even embarrassed about it. I wouldn't have any problem applying a large part of these suggestions, but they clash heavily with all the chapters up to now, as I built a whole development base based on what I've presented so far about the current System. Changing everything would require me to rewrite the entire story. Perhaps a Rewrite isn't impossible, but not for now. When I feel like I've lost track of the situation and can't think of anything else, I'll consider whether to do a Rewrite or simply start a new story, although I think I'll go through with this Fanfic regardless of the quality, after all, it's kind of a 'first time' so it's quite important that I go all the way. But I sincerely thank you for taking some of your time to explain and, in a way, help me, using your more experienced perspective (obviously, I feel like you're much more accustomed to stories than I am!). I definitely learned something from this and maybe I can still use some of these suggestions in the most recent chapters, so again, thank you! If I do a Rewrite, I'll undoubtedly remember everything you told me. Have a good day/good afternoon/good night!

Genuine question: What do you recommend editing? I'm curious. I understood the general part that the System seems to be very strong/OP, but exactly what of the System do you recommend that I edit? Because depending on that, I would need to change a lot of things throughout all the current chapters IF I somehow decide to follow the suggestion. I'm genuinely curious and interested, so please don't misunderstand me! I just want to know more about your suggestion to see if somehow, it's viable.

Thank you for the comment and suggestions! I really hadn't thought about taking some things from the TTGL Movie to make the battle scene, I tried to do it from memory and I confess I failed miserably in making it... impactful, in a way. So thank you for the tip, I will definitely use the original material as a reference for certain battles that will be just like the original in the future (if they exist, lol)! Regarding the part about the System and your suggestion about a 'Great Sage,' well... you kinda figured out what this System is, it's explained a little further ahead. The System is nothing more than Spiral Energy taking shape to guide him, instead of leaving him lost and alone to learn everything about such a complex power. I confess, once again, that I ended up making a mistake and leaving it too late to specify such an important subject like this, so again: thank you for pointing out my mistake! I'll be more careful in the future!

In one of the most recent chapters, I mentioned the Harem. I'm slowly forming a plan for it; it's extremely complicated to write about a Harem, especially when you don't have writing experience. I'm not against the idea, but I'm also not fully supporting it, so I haven't decided completely yet. If I decide, I'll announce it in a message in the most recent chapters AND I'll add the tag if I choose to have the work feature a Harem. It's a very important decision to be made without proper consideration...