instead of directly coming to dialogue, maybe we can add a para or two explaining the world background he teleported to
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omg!! this is such a nice carefully pieced para
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Overall, the story is good and so far it's interesting. The writing quality is also good and the character designing and development is also going smoothly. The author did a good job in giving descriptions about world background and I enjoyed reading this novel. Keep up the good work author
I liked the fl character, who is strong and stands for herself. The story paced well and the author did a good job in describing. The character designing is good, as well as the writing quality. Overall, it's a good story and worth one's time. Keep up the good work author
lol
Trace immediately spun around and started to run. He would not fight that thing- it would dismember him before he landed a punch. And even if he did, he doubted he would do any real damage with his scrawny frame.
Fantasy · TheOneWho_Asked
yup...so be afraid of crazy ppl, hehe
'No one ever touched me. To think she cut me with her sword …. She is one crazy lady…'
Fantasy · redlady
it isn't
Trace sighed. "Well, shit. I'm starting to feel like this isn't a dream." He said, flinching as another roar echoed through the area.
Fantasy · TheOneWho_Asked
it's isn't
Trace sighed. "Well, shit. I'm starting to feel like this isn't a dream." He said, flinching as another roar echoed through the area.
Fantasy · TheOneWho_Asked
duh.....
"She should take a rest …. maybe finding a husband would make her life easier."
Fantasy · redlady
The story is interesting and is a potential one, however I need to say there is a lack of description at places, which makes it hard to imagine when reading. Also, at some places, it's confusing, like it's just happening because MC wants to do it without any motivation behind his actions, also, the first chapter is a bit confusing. So if the author could spare some time to edit the initial chapters, I can say it will reach more audience. Keep up the good work author