it does drop a bit in grammar quality a bit in. However, I think it has potential. I'm just personally tired of almighty systems.
Este pequeño diablo entiende. Las cosas van a ir cambiando con respecto a su personalidad. Descubrirás la razón en capítulos posteriores. Sin embargo, es a propósito, al igual que sus cambios emocionales, que no parecen coincidir con su carácter.
Author your work is amazing! The writing quality is almost perfect, even as an English major I've found only a few mistakes. I love that you gave Yang Chan a low status background. I like the dynamic between Yang Chan and Amon, I feel like everyone tends to overdo the system, so I find this very refreshing. This is defiantly a hidden gem, and I hope it gets more attention.
Little Devil Here! Author this is a great story so far, was a bit worried about the smut tag going in, as some authors just skip over the plot itself. Glad your giving time for the story to develop! I would personally like an auxiliary chapter, to go further in depth with the power levels of your novel.
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Tomé nota, estoy usando el traductor de Google, así que perdone cualquier error. Esto cambiará en capítulos posteriores, ya que hay reproches aún desconocidos por el personaje principal para retroceder. En cuanto a la comedia... bueno, cada uno por su cuenta, supongo, este pequeño diablo pensó que era divertido.
Little Devil here! Thanks, and actually he is meant to be a bit conflicting. However that will be solved in the later chapters. A new auxiliary chapter is in the works. Important info regaurding one's self ego, Dao heart, and Heart Devils will be included. I cannot give away anymore without spoilers. Hoped this helped!
The beginning was a bit rough, but after you get through it comes together. I'm 15 chapters in and I'm starting to like where this story is going! Keep it up author your doing good work!
Little Devil Here! I'm an English major, and I can appreciate the suspense you've managed to work into your novel. I'm not a real fan of mystery/supernatural. However, even 11 chapters I can tell its on the higher end of the spectrum of quality. I'm going to keep reading, and I'm hoping for a bit more background information.
Fate can't really take direct action. Fate will basically arrange a small domino effects to tilt situations around him to be unfavorable for our MC. So, things that look like coincidence and happenstance might be Fatee's doing. The higher your fate value the better your odds that the balence tips in your favor. We will get into more about Fate and Chais once Gu Erin's new Tutor arrives. Hope this Little Devil helped!
Gu Erin fell to the ground again, as every element went through Gu Erin in a matter of a few minutes. All of his body was bleeding and scorched. Gu Erin had completed a single complete circulation, and the resulting rampant qi caused him to suffer a backlash. Gu Erin had not anticipated such a speed without a proper technique. Without a proper cultivation technique all he would do is harm his own pathways.
Heaven's Mercy
Eastern · ReadingDevil
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original Heaven's Mercy
[Attention Humans of the World 'Earth'.] [You are about to be transported to Heaven's Mercy whereupon you shall be able to gain the power needed to acclimate to your world after your stay in Heaven's Mercy.] [The Heavens does not force its will upon anyone. You will be given the option to decline or accept this offer. You have one 'Earth' hour to decide.] [59:59] [59:58] [59:57] Gu Erin smiled, it was not a kind smile. He did not know who or what gave him this second shot at life, but this time he would change the fate of his world and the ones he loved. He already knew the first steps that must be taken. * The last protector of Earth had fallen, sacrificing his very existence for revenge. Betrayed by his fellow cultivators and surrounded on all sides by his enemies, he dies fighting with every ounce of strength left within him. Unknowing that he had grabbed the attention of a primordial being. The being however, only smiles at his plight thinking it was interesting to watch, so with this slight will the essence of time and fate broke and warped. Gu Erin now finds himself in a interesting position, now a day before it all started. Not knowing that his fate and the fates of everything in existence was just casually played with by an almighty being. Yet despite everything he decided on one thing. He needed the power to change everything, and this time, he would not be so kind in obtaining it. *** WARNING: This is a warning to anyone who might be easily triggered by sensitive topics. Please take note of this warning before reading.50 Chs 84 คอลเลกชัน
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Netori: Stealing The Hero's Party!
Fantasy · Writersblockills