That ability of his flame to cool his emotions down is crazy useful, he better not be an idiot and master that asap.
I’m not sure if this changed in the later chapters, but man, why are you not separating paragraphs? It makes the story so tedious to read, I’m trying to give it a chance but idk how many more chapters I can read if there’s no spacing. Not trying to bash the author or anything, just constructive criticism; it really makes it hard to read, hope you can change that.
Honestly, I just don’t get the way he did things considering he has such vast experience as a cultivator. He could have rescued Haku in a different manner. he can’t blame anyone else for his own stupidity.
His inadequacies had drawn the fatal attention of Ramman and Rainslif. His actions, however indirect, had led to his parents' demise.
Grimoire of Cultivation
Fantasy · ValdenePatriarch
Tyftc. As I’ve said before, good potential and decent writing, consider improving your release schedule and you might even be able to make some money through patreon or something. Anyways, looking forward to the development of the story.
The grammar has been alright, not that many mistakes. Are you going to continue writing the story? Or have you dropped it? Thanks for the reply!
Honestly pretty good, I’ve only read a few chapters so far, but I like the characters and pacing of the story so far, I’ll give a more complete review after reading a bit more. On that note, I would like to know if the author is continuing this work, I don’t wanna pay to unlock chapters for a story that’s been dropped. Thanks and good job author.
Making a prediction here. The girl is gonna be better at handling flux than the mc, at least to begin with, for some reason a lot of people use that dynamic when writing these kinds of novels, we’ll see.
The professor waited until all the students were comfortably seated, their attention fully directed toward him. "Very well, each of you has the lifespan of 8 springs, which is the perfect moment to begin the path of a Flux cultivation practitioner," declared the professor, addressing the eager gazes of the students. "Before we delve into the practice of cultivation, let's gain a better understanding of what Flux is and how its cultivation works."
Echoes of Sacrifice
Fantasy · Windbladex
You don’t have to keep repeating his name over and over in the same paragraph, it’s redundant and makes it weird to read.
Primo, who was hit by the light, fell down and felt dizzy. Primo tried to endure the pain with his remaining consciousness. Primo felt falling on the floor, suddenly like falling on a pile of dirt, even Primo could grasp the dirt before finally losing consciousness.
Celestara
Fantasy · FinandaDeximo
'I will give myself exactly one month of time.'
Genetic Ascension
Fantasy · Awespec
How come he hasn’t investigated the mental aspect of his ability though, after it calmed him down when he faced those soldiers I thought he would definitely want to find out more about it.
The Eldrim Cards Legacy
Fantasy · lifesketcher