just a tip when translating this into english. Use porcelain instead of jade-like, it is the equivalent in most of the English speaking world.
The sight of the noble red-haired beauty's smooth, jade-like thighs instantly caught Akira's attention.
In DxD Starting with Sign-Ing in as the Red Dragon
Anime & Comics · Roaaaa
Is he going to only be past oriented or will he or has he been studying muggle science and knowledge? Mostly curious in the sense of when he goes to Skagos, if he creates a city will he only design it to look cool? Since Harry hasn't attended muggle school since 10-11 he wouldnt know much about how to design a city properly. And if he plans to use magic for everything will you explore not everyone being able to use certain ammenities due to the lack of access to magic?
Honestly the interactions with the family and Jadelyn is starting to piss me off.
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Creating games in the future
Others · just_a_potato_soul
this whole violent women portion has been ill conceived. it doenst make much sense to be included in the story.
So the author is writing originally in spanish?
" Haha, it wasn't that expensive, and it can destroy children. "
Creating games in the future
Others · just_a_potato_soul
I am fine with cultivation worlds. Honestly the only critique I have for you is how quickly you pass through worlds or interact with their plots outside of Harry Potter. But You have mentioned returning to previous worlds is a possibility so I just follow your flow and hope you pull something off that makes sense. As for the story for cultivation stories, their just power fantasies primarily and I do not read or watch many of them due to my issue with poor translations.
Usually I don't have an issue with things unless it is a change in something like the system's core like giving it sentience or simply does not fit logically in the lore or the story. You could do something morally irreprehensible and I would be fine since it is a story you are telling and sometimes flawed characters are good. Plus if it is sexual, I am pretty sure 90% of readers on this site are just horny so I don't think most would hate you for that unless its like NTR towards the protagonist or something and even then some people like that. I think the only thing outside of my previous stated points are the summoning of people, just feels like convolution of the story how most people use it. (aka too large of a harem)
His exercises were intense, for a five-year-old. However, using the Healing Palm Jutsu to whatever aches in his body proved to be useful as it accelerates the natural healing abilities to an absurd rate. 'Well not the same as Tsunade's Jutsus but this has been very helpful for me.'
System in Assassin's Creed
Video Games · Kulark
Have you considered language translation when expanding abroad?
This whole part of the system is retarded. It offers false/unneeded conflict in the way it has been portrayed. IF it isnt revealed soon I will drop this and note the author's username so I dont read anything else from them.
The cat perked up, its whiskers twitching with amusement.
DXD: Naruto Recreation System
Anime & Comics · King_001FN
The preface of the title is The Witcher but your summary nor does your chapter titles include anything from from the witcher series so I am curious if that is a mistranslation or something that shows later in the story?
The Wizard: Ascending Beyond Marvel
Movies · Rez_