yes, I wanted to make it simple and easily understand... so that readers easily figure out whose thoughts and comments it came from. is it ok? or should I change it? I am open for suggestion
It has a great plot. Kudos to you for being able to pull off using intricate words.
the way you build the world of your story was really good. When I am reading a certain story I tend to visualize the authors description. You have written it in a manner that I can imagine the world your trying to build up. I can also feel the pain and anger of your lead. Nice work
The flow of thought needs fixing...but overall I like the plot. it is quite an interesting story line.
Thank you for your insights. My heart swells with pride knowing someone understood my novel.... Thank you for inspiring words. I will try to draft a better story line. your words gave me a boost as a writer. Have a pleasant day.
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original Ayumi
I am Ayumi Madrigal, the sole Survivor of Katana pack. Katana Pack are werewolves who are blessed with abilities sought after by people. Abilities we can harness when we turn 18 years old after our first shift. We share these abilities with our true mate, mate chosen by the Moon Goddess. Once a Katana member dies our abilities are passed on to our family member or our mate. Making them acquire more strength, providing them with a new ability. I have been hunted for 8 years now by Tibolo pack; the people responsible for my packs' demise. Although I am powerful, revenge is not an option. Surviving is my priority. I have discovered recently that my mate is the only Son of Alpha Apollo Saavedra head of Tibolo pack. He is my hunter who turned prey. Will he survive the surge of pain till the full moon? How will his pack accept the fact that now I am paired by the Moon Goddess to its future Alpha.45 Chs 2 คอลเลกชัน
thank you
Ayumi
Fantasy · DhonAlair