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Dude give props to the actual author On fanfiction.net boomvroomshroom

Alright I just read 3 chapters of this and it has potential BUT there are some critiques I would like to say as for instance this story feels rushed not like u just thought of this idea and wrote it immediately with our planning anything about this story but it’s that your saying all these things that we don’t see like when Batman first fought tommy u said that tommy already heard of the Batman yet we never learned of this until the fight. And the fact that tommy already has a grasp of being in a new world and specifically GOTHAM which I can tell you if anyone was to be placed in 1 another world and 2 to be put in specifically gotham I don’t think anyone would be able to acclimate to it in only their second day of being there and don’t think even Gotham will let a kid that doesn’t have ID get a job because a employer will have to do background checks when u try to apply to a job so they know they don’t have a psychopath working for them. That’s mainly it though in my opinion it ok P.S you should make sure to try and read your writing after your done or get someone to do it for you