FenikeX

slower, much slower, I believe the story would have a better taste and enjoyment. And it would be a better way to develop your writing and creative skills

I think it's going too slow and with too much fuss, because it ends up making things seem too rigid and with too much excess information to be able to express everything in such a short time, I think you could slow it down a bit (you can see examples of games like Multiverse Cliché, and Cursed Gamer, I think they exemplify this well of traveling between worlds and gaining power, even if it doesn't give 100% perfect form)