EnthusiasticWalks

Define "good." I'm all for mcs treating their women well, but if he keeps women enemies alive, I'm out.

I'm not gonna lie, I nearly dropped this novel twice, but begrudgingly continued because I had literally nothing else to ignore my beleaguered life with. Then, I'm not sure when, but this novel became insanely gripping and the comments built traction again. I thought I'd share, since most novels are the opposite.

Dear author, I'm loving what you're trying to do and want to succeed, so I'm letting you know what I think from an outside perspective. I can see how much you're influenced by COTE. However, it seems like you're seeking the rewards of the mystery instead of writing a story. COTE has a vibe where seemingly normal interactions are twisted behind the scenes. For example, a woman has Ayanokouji cook for her in one book, similar to your cauliflower soup scene. However, Ayanokouji agrees because he's forced to. People are trying to get him expelled, and she has him cook for her to get him expelled, and he exposed her and didn't get expelled at the end. It's all interconnected. Your scene, by contrast, is just feeding the character's desperation to get him to love her without reason. Later, the scene is meaningless as the Ayato deduces a random ruse in an unearned development. Not the same. Also, duly note that COTE's entertainment factor that balances the lack of action is the games. I'm a bit frustrated because I can see your talent and potential, but didn't get what you can bring. I hope you continue writing this style of novel. I'll look forward to your next work as you learn and improve. Thanks for writing! 🙏