I appreciate the feedback, I'll fix it and make writing as fluent as I can.
[9 AM Xenovia Academy 1 Elite Class Floor 30]
Rift Dweller: The Forgotten Kingdom
Fantasy · Mr_Morning_Star
I will take that into consideration, thank you for pointing it out!
"I have no other choice but to be ready, if I waste this chance given to me I'm no better than some trash."
Rift Dweller: The Forgotten Kingdom
Fantasy · Mr_Morning_Star
Sorry for the confusion he's supposed to be alone with Tanna, the brothers are with Iran. I've not checked the early parts after I edited and rereleased this novel. Also thank you so much for reading it! I'll appreciate any criticism or feedback.
"Darvin, long time no see, I came to drop off my nephews and make sure they don't get in trouble." they both let out heavy laughs.
Rift Dweller: The Forgotten Kingdom
Fantasy · Mr_Morning_Star
How exactly do I do that?
I would appreciate it if you left a review of what you think so far. It really helps with the algorithm. Be honest if you do.
Hello, I've caught up to privilege. There's a new chapter if you would like to still read from tomorrow onward there are going to be 2-4 uploads daily. Look forward to it.
I'm leaving a five star review to Mr.Mysteries as I wish him luck on this new venture as a fellow writer. Read all chapters out love the concept and hope it does well in the long run!
See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule
See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule
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Set in a world distant from today, Xerith inhabits the strongest remaining humans from the great apocalypse that happened seven hundred years ago. Now split into 5 parts the world has regressed again and is on the brink of danger. Raphael, a teenage boy of unknown origin is adopted into a poor abusive family. He knows the current state of the world better than anyone else. This in turn forces him into a decision which changes his life forever...63 Chs 1.3k คอลเลกชัน
I've had problems with this before it seems pretty forced I planned to get rid of it completely thank you for pointing it out.
"Got it, Iran, no slip-ups." Raphael nodded, and Tanna let out a giggle. They were now officially together. "Let's get going; we are all exhausted," Iran said as the xerat came to pick us up from the front of the ballroom building. Tanna had drank a little, and so had Raphael. Tipsy and all, they went to Raphael's room to sleep. They met the head butler in the hallways, "Madam, your room is that way!" he said. "Oh, don't worry, we meant to go to Raphael's room either way but good to know."
Rift Dweller: The Forgotten Kingdom
Fantasy · Mr_Morning_Star