My second criticism of the author's fanfic, I almost gave up after reading up to chapter 28, I made some criticisms and the author and he convinced me to continue reading, on the web there is also no kingdom building fanfic so I kept reading, now I really like the fanfic and I'm practically on chapter 60, my only complaint is that the points of view that appear in the fanfic have to be of interesting and important characters not of small NPC, the protagonist could have more prominence then the fanfic would be perfect
The big flaw in this fanfic is the protagonist, author you have to highlight the protagonist he looks like a robot he's making the fanfic boring
I really wanted to give it 5 stars but there are certain things that really bother me about the story. I read it up to chapter 28. The protagonist doesn't even appear in the story properly, like he doesn't have any feats or dialogue that makes us readers like him. The protagonist is insignificant in the story because he doesn't have any moments that the protagonist has. Another thing I hate about this story is how the author portrayed the protagonist's army as much more intelligent, strong and perfect, while all the people of Westeros are dumb. It took a lot of the fun out of the story. I don't know if I'll be able to continue reading if this isn't fixed.
Until chapter 15 things are pretty boring, the protagonist doesn't do anything relevant and barely appears, his soldiers aren't the least bit charismatic or interesting, as the story goes on you start rooting for the protagonist's army to die because they're all wretches.
Thank you for the chapter, honestly author, it was possible to summarize these 7 chapters in 2 well written chapters
I'm not saying it out of malice or hate, I just want the first Jurassic Park fanfic I read to be good, so far it's 7/10, thank you for your understanding author and I will support this fanfic until the end.
There are 6 chapters and every time the MC is in the Giganotosaurus enclosure the same narrative happens about the connection between them being instinctive and everything else, every time this
I love the Jurassic Park universe and I really like that you, the author, are making a story about it, but there are problems in the story, every chapter seems like the same thing happens, there are 6 chapters with the same thing happening, there is nothing new in the story, and the way the protagonist owns the park but can't do anything because he's waiting for the disaster is very stupid.
thanks for the chapter
I DON'T BELIEVE IT, THE GOD OF FAILURES IS BACK, I KNEEL BEFORE THE KING
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