LazyWisp

LazyWisp

female LV 2

I write

2022-01-12 เข้าร่วมแล้ว Global
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LazyWisp
LazyWisp
11 months ago
Replied to LazyWisp

And not to rush but unless your going to hunker down for a 300+ chapter story the pace might need to be upped a bit

LazyWisp
LazyWisp
11 months ago
Posted

Starting this review I want to talk about the positive. Author does an excelllent job of portraying characters and depicting scenes while occasionally I spot inconsistencies it’s not a completely unbearable read like 97% of the subpar novels on this app. The negative will only affect you if depending on your knowledge of jjk. A scene in particular that threw me off was when Reno even remotely struggled with Flyheads. Flyheads are so weak that even windows can safely handle them with no risk they’re catagorized as under 4th grade. Even fourth grade spirits are immensely weak mind you I’d suggest watching the clip of Gojo explaining how powerful each rank is to Itadori for reference. I understand that you want to properly grow your character and not just have them be extremely broken, but mind that 80% of sorcerer talent is innate although with a system that point is rendered irrelevant but even then… I’m ranting -_- TLDR: Everything is good just ensure you know just how the rankings scale (:

LazyWisp
LazyWisp
1 years ago
Commented

Update: Not dropped just needa focus in for finals will be back soon meanwhile I’ll drop small POV interludes and I won’t forget triple update when I come back fully

LazyWisp
LazyWisp
1 years ago
Replied to King_Yosh

I won’t spoil but these next few chapters will be an attempt to give more background on the world without info dumping so you’ll likely gain a lot more clarification into my envisioned world.

LazyWisp
LazyWisp
1 years ago
Replied to King_Yosh

And the move he used was revenge

LazyWisp
LazyWisp
1 years ago
Replied to King_Yosh

Yeah these are wild Pokémon so expect simple strats like kiting I think Machamp could only pull that fake because he was a fighting Pokémon

LazyWisp
LazyWisp
1 years ago
Commented

Just finished chapter 4 hopefully I can get a backlog soon, but it's a juicy one. (:<

LazyWisp
LazyWisp
1 years ago
Replied to King_Yosh

It came out early again ;-;

LazyWisp
LazyWisp
1 years ago
Commented

If you were part of the small amount of people ho got to see this chapter earlier because timed publishing glitched again consider yourself fortunate ;-;

LazyWisp
LazyWisp
1 years ago
Replied to King_Yosh

This chapter was rushed so I had to skip out on a build up. tmrw more than likely I’ll go over this chap and chap 1 to improve the build up of the world to hopefully bring about some clarity