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other universes are ok, but it needs to one have a way to drive the plot forward, also should be more like an ark where she stays there for a bit, also if she does then she shouldn't be immediately one of the strongest things there, there should be a challenge, whether that is an opponent or an issue to contend with. That being said there is a lot you could do in the hp world first

Yh, don't get discouraged, if you are not sure about a chapter maybe next time put a disclaimer first so people know and you will hopefully get more constructive feedback, also please keep the sub, it's not something you see all the time, or even having them be a switch, it's a nice change of pace.

It was a bit out of left field, I dont mind the mc being a sub in the bedroom but it should be consensual, that last chapter was her essentially becoming a slave, which could be a interesting plot point if done correctly with her breaking free and getting revenge, but the skill think made it feel to easy and her two accepting, even if she is a succubus it was a bit random, the relationship with the futa centaur could still be done but in a more consensual and better flowing way, maybe its her making amends by helping them (not sexually) and the two becoming closer that way.