Building, not Nuilding.
Jon: Do you want people to understand you and follow you? Nuilding strong and sincere alliances with you? Start to know them, then understand them and understand their needs to finally offer them something that will allow them to get by following you and not by threatening people.
Game of Thrones : Nano Machines
TV · The3Entities
loved this little twist, I totally didn't see that coming at all. the arc overall took a good amount of leeway, but it all fit well within the confines of the story
Anyway, I guess I owe some explanations. When I said I'll be taking some liberties with canon content, I was referring to the Reaper Death Seal and Edo Tensei. I've explained the changes to the Reaper Death Seal in this chapter.
Naruto : The Wind Calamity
Fantasy · Devil_Hex
These small filler bits make this story so good; add them in whenever you feel they're needed. :)
"Oh my god, just profess your undying love for each other already," Lucian groaned, causing Thalia and Annabeth to chuckle.
Percy Jackson: Son of Hades - Prince of the Underworld
Book&Literature · Shadow_D_Monarch3
as a dispute between purebloods could this not be elevated into a blood fued between families?
"Yes, it does! This is all your fault!" Ron shouted, the look on his face turning from rage to triumph. "I challenge you to a wizard's duel - midnight in the trophy room!"
Harry Potter Getting Even
Fantasy · Mystic_Verse
this is great. a bit cheesy because it feels so out of place when the entire story was taken into context, but if you keep this level of detail it'd be great. or you should be more selective when you dive into the vivid details, the stop and go flow of this gets very jarring and annoying
Orion leaned in closer, his eyes wide with anticipation, as if he could sense the intensity of his father's recollection.
TVD: The Tribrid Legacy
TV · ParadiseHeights
it's so funny to me. you have bits of gold that has been weaved together beautifully and then just blocks of brick randomly placed. it reminds of the image of a horse that starts as a life like rendition and then the opposite side is a child's drawing. if you can work on smoothing out interactions between characters and individual actions it'd be so much better. your strengths definely lie in you general descriptions even if they are a bit too flowery for what the reader expects.
Orion's lips curved into a tender smile, his eyes shining with hope. "I would like that," he replied, his voice carrying a delicate blend of vulnerability and optimism. In that moment, a fragile bond began to form, promising the mending of broken ties and the blossoming of a new relationship
TVD: The Tribrid Legacy
TV · ParadiseHeights
some other disciptions, they tend to turn into pointless words. it snowed snowy snow. I described a scene without really describing anything. it breaks the atmosphere that you were building in a frustrating way. WORDHIPPO will be your best friend. it's a good story so far but some big holes that are just skipped over. Keep up the good work, you'll only get better as you go
As they approached the revered family register, they felt reverence. Weathered by time yet filled with countless narratives, the book lay open on a sturdy wooden pedestal. The pages within whispered the secrets and legacies of the Labonair lineage, waiting to be explored and embraced.
TVD: The Tribrid Legacy
TV · ParadiseHeights
so he stumbles out of bed half asleep and sees an atractive girl his own age, and learns that this is Hailey. how is he dressed, how is he not shocked, how is he still so deadpan. idk about but I'm usually not sleeping fully clothed, but he is just constantly unfazed? he could be a little more human
"My name is Orion," he replied evenly. "And I've been expecting you."
TVD: The Tribrid Legacy
TV · ParadiseHeights
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original a rough story getting a rewrite
4.16 เสร็จสมบูรณ์
You had it all but lost it due to factors outside of your control. Granted a new life in a world that defies physics, you know your clan is fated to fall. You find yourself with a sister fated to die. Do you control fate? Or does it control you? REWRITE IS FINALLY HAPPENING! (Slowly) The story may have holes due to having never read the manga; comment on any changes or things you want to see! It's a comedy/Adventure with a good amount of AU details. (at least, I hope. I wouldn't say I'm a good author yet, but I'm better than I was!)34 Chs 5.4k คอลเลกชัน
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Project Camelot
Disaster lies on the horizon. Humanities only hope is to rely on self-mutation with the assistance of an AI. Project Camelot was created to push their biology to its limit while playing a game. How far can you go? How would you react if nearly everything you knew was gone? ---- Just a fun Lit RPG I'm making. no fixed release rate Any quests you want to see comment below and I will do my best to incorporate them.17 Chs 10 คอลเลกชัน
- original
The Mortal's Throne
In the time before the gods, there were great beings of power who ruled over the mortals and monsters. Then came the gods who vanquished the titans and brought forth a new era. In this new era, there are whispers of a titan who was too powerful to be defeated, even by the gods. Some dismiss this as rumer or simple gossip, others however take it as gospel. Some seek to free this mighty titan, but how can a mortal stand against a god? Sometimes, outside help is required. ____________ I do not own Titan Quest. I'm just a big fan of the game. I will continue until the end of Act 1 of the game and may continue into the other acts in the future. I hope you enjoy my retelling of the game!29 Chs 67 คอลเลกชัน
- original
I Think It Glitched...
เสร็จสมบูรณ์
if you saw instructions on a paper, would you follow them? what if you were the only one to see them? what if you could make anything, learn anything, what would you become?9 Chs 10 คอลเลกชัน
- original
Dragon Born, Second Calling
Life was a Struggle. Isolated with no one but his long time caretaker. He spent most of his life bedridden. Till one day he fell asleep and everything changed. Now he has friends, parents, and a mentor. And most importantly, Magic. From bedside medicine to combat and competition. Due to his excellent awareness and desire for adventure, home becomes too small. With a new world to explore, who knows what he will find. Who knows where he will go. Who knows to what heights he will climb. Supreme Sorcerer Etanali. Dragon Born, Dungeon Conqueror. His Adventure Begins.24 Chs 31 คอลเลกชัน
the second behind him is redundant, if he look behind himself the scenery he sees could only be within his line of sight. loving the story, just a small thing here
Fujin was standing on a cliff, and a step in front of him was a pitch-black valley. He couldn't see the bottom of it. Fujin glanced behind him and observed the scenery behind him. Unlike the deep valley in front of him, there was hard ground behind him. The area looked like a flat mountain top.
Naruto : The Wind Calamity
Fantasy · Devil_Hex