LEGION_HERO

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It's got what it takes. Just need to work harder that's all there is to it. Just stars or good reviews cannot decide the quality of a story. It matters nt wheather you have a successful following. The most important thingsis to ask yourself whether you have put your heart in your work while writing this.

I hope not. But I cannot say for sure because the story may go in any direction.

This is cringe as fuck. I know the premise and idea were good when they was first introduced but this is getting old real quick. As soon as the story progresses, the mc forget his original motive to visit the worlds and just visits them for the sake of gathering more and more harem members. I don't know what happened but even someone like me can clearly tell this author wants to write smut. The story would still be good if it was a tiny bit more serious. I cannot read a single chapter without coming across a fucking sex scene of characters with questional intents and body proportions. If you want to write smut, or all intents go write smut Einlion. But if you want to write a good story, just write one. Because as it is, the number of sex scenes have become so ridiculously high that it has outweighed the general quality of the story. The more chapters I read I cannot help feel that Vahn is becoming more of a self important little shit and doesn't even treat his women as humans now. Forget making time for them, he is busy gathering more like a raging pervert. I don't think that many can relate to this very much. Your story could definitely do without more sex scenes. But then again, this has become your identity. So no matter what you write, how you write it, you will always be known as a smut fanfic writer. Many people like to dwelve themselves on smut to feel a quick bite of reading pleasure in this modern world. But to go cashing in on that and jeopardising that entire nature of the story is definitely not ok. I used to like your story a lot myself. I looked upto you. For small fanfic writers like me, you were an example of how far a fanfic can reach in it's popularity. I used to think that this Einlion guy could bring something new to the table and do something that has never been done before. But no. As soon as your creativity is extinguished, you straight up go and turn your mc into a pervert who goes to worlds seeking more women much like today's isekai animes. And that does do much trust me. You cannot watch an isekai anime now without cringing in the first ten seconds. You story's like that now. Even us small fanfic writers are not that desperate. At least we try to give or story a different twist even though we know that not many will read it.

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