I am a bit confused. There doesn't seem to be a mention of a time skip until it mentions Esca's passing.
Valerian woke up the next day when sunlight flooded the library. He yawned as he recalled what day it was. He would be the last to go to bed and the first to get up. He hurriedly stood up and rushed to the bathroom. After quickly relieving his bowels and washing, he rushed to the garden directly.
Valerian, The Legendary
Fantasy · THE_WORDSMITH
Reminds me of the GTA 5 Mechanic
"Alright, I've finished scanning through these phones, unlocking locked files and folders, you name it," said the techno. "So, what do you need, boss?"
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Fantasy · John_Doever
I've just noticed something with these stories, Earth refers to the material which makes up the earth, usually on the crust, but this world probably isn't Earth, although I can't think of a word which would work. Soil, Dirt, Ground...they don't really work since Earth magic affects dirt and stone, and ores and such.
Billy knew several ones a lot bigger than that, but they were from Earth… in any case, now he could see why Edward wanted the cooperation of the elementalists. To cross something that large, they would need a very steady bridge, and the people of the town didn't know how to build them with wood. Earth magic was truly the only solution. Still, considering that the elementalists didn't know how to make a bridge, it might not last for long. When everyone approached, they saw some weird movements on the lake… Some big ass fish were there, and they had the ugliest appearance compared to all the others Billy had seen on Earth. Their teeth were quite long and couldn't even stay inside their mouth when it was closed. When a stupid kid approached too much, one of the creatures fired a Water Ball at his stomach and made him fall on the ground, unable to breathe due to the pain for a few seconds.
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Fantasy · ExSoldierLv99
She didn't seem very mad... it looks like Billy is the one who is overreacting to me
"What I mean is that it seems that they are short handed, since she never managed to wound me…" Billy said and frowned as well. "Geez… what is wrong with you? Why are you so angry this early in the morning?"
I Can Make Everything Level UP
Fantasy · ExSoldierLv99
health*
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Fantasy · PhantomMedjay
See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola
Well. That's quite a lot for a person to go through. The father dies, the mother hangs herself, and then his new love also decides to do the same, leaving him behind all alone even though he tried to hard to keep them safe. Quite selfish if you ask me, although they weren't exactly in the right mindset, it was still selfish regardless.
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Fantasy · PhantomMedjay
I think they're confused because Synthia was asking for food a bit quickly after experiencing such a tragic and emotionally difficult situation. I think most people would lose their appetite in this situation.
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Fantasy · PhantomMedjay
It's kinda crazy to think how terrifying it would be for a woman in a scenario like this. Almost all men would just be killed or injured, but women are much more at risk to prolonged torture, and it makes you think about how it must be day to day, because in many countries, walking alone at night, and sometimes during the day, is dangerous in that it won't just be a robbery most of the time, but something worse. Of course some men would be raped too by other men or even women, but it would be much rarer.
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Fantasy · PhantomMedjay
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original Down The Cliff
Kudu, the town above the mortal world is a mysterious place. Housing only a thousand inhabitants, the town is peaceful. Everyone knows each other, and trust isn't something people even need to think about. Son of the Chief's former right-hand man, Liro loves his family and his town. After all, this town is his home, however when he finds out that he is fated to spend his adult days working a dull, uninteresting, and repetitive job for the Chief, he feels conflicted. Does he stay and fulfill his duty in his homeland... or does he follow his dreams and seek adventure through the dangers of the unknown?4 Chs 0 คอลเลกชัน
The story is good overall, and I do like how the characters are portrayed, however the actual quality and consistency of the writing is definitely the biggest drawback of this story. A few time skips were not even mentioned, entire days unaccounted for with no mention of them passing, the tense changes from past to present regularly, and the usage of commas is excessive and doesn't make sense often. I do enjoy the story a lot- it would just be a lot better if the actual writing were at a higher level.
Valerian, The Legendary
Fantasy · THE_WORDSMITH