Jay_Exile

Jay_Exile

male LV 15

A lazy, bald old man who enjoys reading adventure, martial arts and cyber punk stories. Also avid listener to drum&bass and synth wave.

2020-12-28 เข้าร่วมแล้ว United States
ป้าย 36

Moments 27
Jay_Exile
Jay_Exile
2 years ago
Commented

Himself and he needs to be replaced by herself and she since it's referring to Irene.

Little by little, Princess Irene finally managed to lift the ball. But she couldn't move it from that spot and instead dropped it again. Princess Irene took a deep breath and let it out slowly. She tried to stabilize himself as he felt the blood in his body churning from the suppression of the vest.

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Jay_Exile
Jay_Exile
2 years ago
Commented

I believe that you need to use she here instead of he because it's referring to Irene here not Ziel.

Princess Irene fell silent after she heard Ziel's words because everything he said was true. Didn't he participate in the training to become stronger because he was weak?

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Jay_Exile
Jay_Exile
2 years ago
Commented

Princess Fritz, lol! Prince Fritz, ok.

"Ah, that is…" Princess Fritz wanted to say that her sister was fighting the earth dragon emperor. But his father raised his hand to stop him.

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Jay_Exile
Jay_Exile
2 years ago
Commented

It should be him not her.

Mu Xiaojin didn't know what to say. Yun Qingchen, who was in her arms, suddenly moved at this moment. His two chubby little hands stretched out desperately and waved in Yun Feng's direction. Mu Xiaojin smiled when she saw that. "Xiao Feng, Chenchen wants you to hold her!"

Genius Summoner

Genius Summoner

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Jay_Exile
Jay_Exile
2 years ago
Posted

Not a story I expected to read but found it enjoyable read nonetheless. Needs a comedy tag and definitely is a possible romcom. The MC is vicious yet more humane than most characters in this novel. Honestly think that this web novel is fantastic enough for more chapters but only time can tell. I highly recommend reading this web novel and enjoying the short 40 chapter binge ride. Adding this web novel to my reading list.

Jay_Exile
Jay_Exile
2 years ago
Commented

It should be sister not brother in this context.

"Prince Ozkar, I know that your intentions are good. But whether my brother wants to teach at the academy or not is up to her." Zenoa looked at Prince Ozkar and said seriously.

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Jay_Exile
Jay_Exile
2 years ago
Commented

Young instead of Yong.

"Yong friend, let's talk nicely!" If this continued, his Li family's guards would be gone!

Genius Summoner

Genius Summoner

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Jay_Exile
Jay_Exile
2 years ago
Commented

It should be She not He starting this sentence

"He is the student with the best grades in this academy's entrance examination. Not only smart, but she is also powerful and very charming. I must admit that she is prettier than my aunt, Princess Cattleya." Princess Seira answered in a low voice so that the people around her wouldn't hear, especially Azalia. She didn't want Azalia to be angrier because Princess Seira secretly talked about her with Princess Freya.

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Jay_Exile
Jay_Exile
2 years ago
Commented

Niece should be used here instead of nephew

"I'm not aware of such personal matters either! If you're curious, why don't you ask Ken directly? Didn't you say that you were his acquaintance?" Princess Seira answered frantically. Although she is Kalya's nephew, their relationship is not that close until Kalya wants to discuss her personal relationship.

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Jay_Exile
Jay_Exile
2 years ago
Commented

He should be used here instead of she

"That is…as I said, she is the lover of my aunt, Cattleya Venetia. I thought Princess Irene knew it too when I saw that she wasn't surprised after hearing what I said." Princess Seira heavily repeated her words and looked at Princess Irene. She wanted to drag Princess Irene with her because Princess Seira didn't want to deal with Azalia alone.

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