thanks for the chapter 😁
I added some corrections to the English that I think would make it easier for the reader to understand as I know you said your English wasn't the best
rather than "A sword with a guard" -> "A shortsword" should fit fine as the original description is super vague
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"in the biggest tent" -> "from the biggest tent" as this tells us u can hear it outside the tent
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I would ammend the start of the paragraph to "He summoned" <- from "Summon"
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Rather than it, "rushed Kylio once" -> saying "rushed towards kylio immediately" would be moreeasily understandable
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rather than for turning do many
"XXXX amount has been turned in for turning do many you get a free spin on our roulette," it said, smiling.
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"for turning so many in"
"XXXX amount has been turned in for turning do many you get a free spin on our roulette," it said, smiling.
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also rather than saying practical and invisible which is technically correct but not how people tend to say thing I would say practically invisible as it means nearly invisible which is what I think u were going for 😁
Its been a couple months Kylio was on that grind but he has been slowed for some reason The orc do not span in the same place every time, so he has to go looking for them and if he is not paying attention, an orc mage will get him with their wind magic, which is practical and invisible for some reason. At first, he thought it was a breeze and when he put his hand out, it got cut off, making him scream in pain as another breeze came and killed him.
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original Just surviving
This is the story of a "normal" guy. Ryan was simply living his life only trying to get by he had a classic office job 9 to 5 with minimum pay and it wasn't much but he lived on it and endured it. But then that happened. From that day he was no longer the same and it turned out neither was the world. Read soon to see how he makes it through in this new world of monsters and magic. (novice writer open to criticism) I am a student working towards my gcses so the story will be very on and off5 Chs 4 คอลเลกชัน
I mean at first this had potential but rn it seems like your rushing the power progression honestly I would try to slow it down a bit rather than making the group chat make him 10x stronger cause it feels like that's the route your headed
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