Webnovel Author: BBQChickenAlertBB - Fanfic Collection

I have to ask, are you on fanfiction.net?

I'll throw my hat in the #2 corner my dear fellow fans and author. I believe in this tale of Izuku gaining power through the system, through the architect... unless you change that haha. in any case, I'd also like to provide input towards the development that might help you in your journey of writing. -izuku is a slugger, born and instinctual on that level. instead of daggers, axes, swords and such. Have him favor something less lethal, gauntlets, support items gaged towards the hands. Even staffs, armored shin and foot guards for kicking, and such if you were to have something influence him towards it. Such has him favoring the idea of range due to being scared or realizing he can kick harder than he can punch. -Id say go down the path of MHA storyline and canonlogical events with the influence of the butterfly effect due to the irregularity of Izuku gaining the system from that point in time. Whether thats as a middle schooler who can have more time to develop his growth physically or as an older version such as a almost university student who relies more on gaining skills. it's about mindsets of the age the MC has. Any other changes such as making the setting darker or more light hearted, ect is up to you but I wouldn't make the heros take rankings or 'classes' similar to solo leveling. healers, even more so powerful healers were rarer in MHA compared to enhancement and other types of quirks. -dungeons- Add your own mix on things, we don't need a recap on similar events with the only difference is an axe to a sword or any of that. change the snake to a crocodile or maybe have themed dungeons. your imagination is the limit and I'm sure us readers can provide plenty of ideas if asked for it. werewolves, vampires, mutated animals, hell even types of dinosaurs or humanoid creatures are on the table. have them provide unique rewards pointed towards izuku, not anyone else, he is the MC of your fic. -rewards- it doesn't have to be exactly as solo leveling even, it could be five choices or whatever you choose, maybe add some diversity or such, random third option instead. it can stay the same, I'm just throwing ideas. lastly, the system- systems are a mess of good and bad, and everything thing we want and yet hate. draw us in by making izuku's system a little different than the norm. make us salivate while reading when we get more details or see the updated status. from rewards, quests, his abilities, skills, and such. we want the shadow monarchs powers but that doesn't mean we can't add our own greenette's own twist on it to suit his style. good job bud.

I think the first part of this chapter was kinda forced honestly. it was a little too similar to solo leveling. There will be discrepancies, you as the author have to make that happen. Good writing so far though and we'll thought out ending to the chapter with the blend of elements.

great start! while it's still too early to tell, I have high hopes on you so no pressure haha. a few simple errors but other than that, I like it. great job author!

currently handling some medical issues since mid September, I did update my other story, onlya. few chapters when I got out of the hospital and rehab. though I'm not sure when I'll able to get back onto my computer as I need to have it upgraded since it's falling too far behind anymore and is having difficulty even starting up every once in a while. I'll start plotting out some more chapters though. thanks for the support.

currently handling some medical issues since mid September, I did update my other story, onlya. few chapters when I got out of the hospital and rehab. though I'm not sure when I'll able to get back onto my computer as I need to have it upgraded since it's falling too far behind anymore and is having difficulty even starting up every once in a while. I'll start plotting out some more chapters though. thanks for the support.

I have to say while I'm slightly enjoying the idea of the story. I recommend making your chapters longer, work on the build up, were advancing in this story alongside the MC and yet I feel no attachment to him other than liking the idea of his abilities. describe his appearance here and there if there is differences while incorporating it into the story around the plot line. you got this, just gotta get practice and fine tune it. I Also recommend putting some filler in, too much is bad and can make the reader turn away or lose interest but too little and we feel like we're on a fast roller coaster only going straight. sure we got speed but we want up, down, left, right, backwards and loopity loop.

better on the recovery portion. bravo on that, honestly almost makes up for the whole fiasco haha