I don't get what you're doing with his height. Is he tall or not?
He remembered she used to be so small she could climb on him while he walked with no problem. Now that she laid against him, he realized they were almost the same height. But that was about where the similarity ended.
X-Men: Feral Progeny (Marvel AU/What If?)
Anime & Comics · _Avatar0FFury_
you said it was 2014 in the Xavier Institute and 2020 in this chapter, so wouldn't it be 6 years?
His first trigger. He'd never forgotten it. Not after leaving the Xavier Institute. Not after traveling the world for three whole years….. fighting …. Killing …. Learning the game. The game was vicious Luckily vicious ran as thick as molasses in his blood. He took it in stride. Every bullet to the skull, every Bowie knife through the guts and grenade to the midsection. He took it all. And he'd take more on the hunt for Romulus. So would his brothers and sisters. They were on a battle for freedom.
X-Men: Feral Progeny (Marvel AU/What If?)
Anime & Comics · _Avatar0FFury_
I hope he is still spending time with his mum and being a child and not just working all the time.
Really good again but I feel the chapters are shorter than they were at the start and the pacing is slowing down massively because of that.
I think adding the #pokemon tag to this fic may help you get some more readers
Honestly, with only 11 chapters written, this is one of the best Marvel fics I've read, at least so far and I cannot wait for more. You're insertion of your biological knowledge just enhances it further.Truly I hope this won't be dropped because it has tremendous potential.
I had been aware of this story since before it was even posted as Gnomebob had been telling everyone about an idea of his in the author's notes of his other story. I had thought at the time that it would be like other jumpchain-type fanfiction which I find boring and tiresome. I was wrong. I am so glad I was wrong. I have not read anything akin to this fanfiction and won't as it is probably the first, at least that I am aware of, to have so many original concepts such as the blocking of meta-knowledge which makes it such a fun and interesting read. The integration of multiple OC's is seamless and all of their actions and consequences are based in reality and make it so that the growth aspect doesn't become ludicrous to each reality even if they have access to multiple power systems. The interactions between characters don't remove you from the story and all it really makes you want to do is read more. Great writing all around and absolutely no way to predict what will happen next. Awesome job. I DEFINITELY recommend this story. Honestly just listen to the first note and read the first 3 chapters.
I'd rather you continue this new direction rather than go back because if you do the possibility of that happening again would be annoying and dissuasive to continuing reading.
+1
Harem all day e'ry day(Yes).
BNHA: Singularity
Anime & Comics · Einlion
You've said he is 6 feet, which I consider tall, considering 5'10 is the average for a man but then you've made Laura, who at least in the comics is short at 5'1, tall as well saying she is near to his height and so gabby will probably be around her height as an adult. Then, in this paragraph, you write that gabby, who I think is 11, is nearing his height and that confuses me more because it's like you can't decide to lean into them being short because of Wolverine or not because of their other parent.
He remembered she used to be so small she could climb on him while he walked with no problem. Now that she laid against him, he realized they were almost the same height. But that was about where the similarity ended.
X-Men: Feral Progeny (Marvel AU/What If?)
Anime & Comics · _Avatar0FFury_