mcvamulv

mcvamulv

male LV 15

Spends most my time after work reading novels

2017-06-26 เข้าร่วมแล้ว Denmark
ป้าย 40

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mcvamulv
mcvamulv
2 months ago
Posted

I've only read the first 40 chapters, so this review is based on that. Found the premise and the world interesting, but the story really poorly written. The timeline in the story jumps all over the place, and many times making it hard to keep up at times. Felt like when he traveled that he left the town, something happened on travel, and then he arrived at destination within like 10 lines. Sometimes felt like parts of the story was missing, and when i switched chapters i had to go back and forth a couple of times, because i thought i missed a chapter. And after 40 chapters(hopefully changes later) i dont really understand why the daughter is even in the story, i feel like if you replaced the daughter with some random person, it would change nothing in the story at all.

mcvamulv
mcvamulv
3 years ago
Commented

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon