Tian_Long_Xiu

Tian_Long_Xiu

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2017-11-01 เข้าร่วมแล้ว Global
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1 years ago
Posted

What a good find. I 'm quite suprise of the unexpected plot development, a hard one to pull off. I hope you can maintain the pacing and plot progression of the story. I think you really need to edit the some chapters at the start. There are some errors in writing that I think you can change for better reading experience. The character development is quiite fast, but it become better. Thank you for the stroy. Hoping for more chapters to come.

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Tian_Long_Xiu
1 years ago
Commented

Thanks for the chapter!!!

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Tian_Long_Xiu
1 years ago
Commented

Thanks for the chapter!!!

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