Ya, turns out I mistook the mistress for Heldi--I think I skimmed over the remainder of the paragraph. Either way, thanks for the clarification, though, I ended up figuring it out 1-2 chaps past this point either way. Keep up the great writing.
"You heard the boy. I have no choice but to accept your proposal. My son Bruno, and your daughter Heidi will be married when they both come of age. Or are you willing to retract your offer for reasons unknown to us all?"
Re: Blood and Iron
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Maybe? Either way, I think the point still stands: the characters at this point lacked all subtle social tells when interacting with each other and the environment.
"One of them went for my father, then the other went for my brother. I managed to get my father's old sword but I knew it was too late. I went for the one holding my brother and swung the sword hitting it on the neck but it didn't do anything. Not even a scratch. I tried again but the vampire kicked me. It felt like every bone in my chest was broken. And while I was lying on the ground he walked over to me covered in my brother's blood and looked down at me and smiled. Then everything went black. I woke up in the dark uninjured. My father and brother were dead and I was…different. I didn't know what to do. I was scared. So I buried them and then started walking along the road in search of help. After a little while a pain started to grow in my throat, but I pushed on. When I came to the village. I could hear their heartbeats. And that's when I knew what I had become. The monster I now was. I couldn't bring myself to become like them. The ones who killed the only family I had and loved. so I started leaving when I saw your fire. And well you know the rest." Julius said, lowering his head again.
The Immortal (twilight fanfiction)
Movies · Beans_on_a_tree
"Both come of age"? Are they both below 18 (I thought she was in her 20's) or is there a difference in German marriage law that I'm not aware of?
"You heard the boy. I have no choice but to accept your proposal. My son Bruno, and your daughter Heidi will be married when they both come of age. Or are you willing to retract your offer for reasons unknown to us all?"
Re: Blood and Iron
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From one of the author's notes, it seems that romance will be a thing later in the story, though he was asking which character Yuji should date, which leaves me with little confidence in that regard. Oh, and at the time the author was bringing up romance, Yuji was still pretty much a blank slate—something that also makes me feel pretty iffy when it comes to the romance quality.
You have my attention, Mr. Man.
After carefully reading the documents he brought along with him, I signed them and my family's inheritance is now mine. The bank accounts of my parents and siblings will be closed and the money sent to my account. Meaning I have enough to live by for a while but I'd ultimately need to get a source of income.
VECTOR IN DC
Anime & Comics · Maverick_DaSupreme
because I've read way worse and the people on webnovel don't care all that much about quality (generally it's quantity over quality on here). I also think rating it lower would do the author a bit of a disservice; once a novel get below 4* overall people will likely skip over it entirely.
quick question: why do you keep telling us it's still the MC's perspective? I'd understand if we just transitioned from someone else's POV, but this isn't the case.
Though, maybe I misunderstood?
"That would be my horse chariot arena, the imperator herena (emperor's arena)." I said, looking over my shoulder at her.
The Immortal (twilight fanfiction)
Movies · Beans_on_a_tree
Fair enough, I guess. I'm not sure why you were so sarcastic about it, but thanks for the opinion. Tip: Work on comma usage: "Disagree. It only increased my ImMErSiOn." becomes "Disagree, it only increased my ImMErSiOn."
"That would be my horse chariot arena, the imperator herena (emperor's arena)." I said, looking over my shoulder at her.
The Immortal (twilight fanfiction)
Movies · Beans_on_a_tree
Quick question: Why do you keep telling us what characters are about to say before the actual dialogue? It's common enough that I feel a need to ask. Is it just a quirk of your writing style?
Elsa couldn't help but make an embarrassing statement about her youngest child and his current refined appearance.
Re: Blood and Iron
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