I appreciate your opinion and I know that there are certain cases, not all the time, but there are. The pacing is still quite quick which I'm pretty sure has been improved on in later chapters, but just as your reply and my review have value. The problem with the entire review is that it's based on first impressions. Which are usually crucial for the growth of a novel. Call me shallow, but I stand by the fact that the way you introduced us to the character and the pacing are extremely fast. I respect the fact that at least you took the time to read my review. Have a nice time writing, Sir Author.
I know you invite me to read, since its your novel, and I appreciate the offer but I have to politely decline.
I would like to start off that I only read up until chapter 5, so take this review with a grain of salt, and I will be mostly focusing on the main character/writing quality. The two main issues I noticed right off the bat is the fact that the character adapted to his circumstances extremely quickly. and the pacing of the story is over the roof, and to be quite fair. It makes no sense. As a thirteen year old child people would expect them to be full of questions and have issues adapting, but instead we see him act like an adult and make rational and extremely unlike choices for a child. This makes no sense considering he just woke up and after an hour of him living his new life he already realized he is in the karate kid/cobra kai world. His interaction with his father is also forceful, but that might be because of his strained relationship with his parents. The pacing makes the unnatural adaptation of the child even worse, and adding another layer of doubt towards the novels progression. Since the pacing and character are so bad it is starting to affect the story development since chapter 5, and making the development less competent. basically we are rushing to build the house and forgot to reinforce the foundation, this will create plothole which leads to dissatisfaction. World Background is 5*, cuz its a fanfiction held inside an already popular series. Updates is 5*. lots of chapters and a really responsive author. good overall
wouldnt it be better to superimpose two and two sound bullets and connecting them instead of connecting a weaker sound bullet to a stronger one?
I thought Rui is an all rounder, but ever since this new "mission" all he has done is just politics, and politics, and now he upgrades his long range, when its clear that its gonna ruin the balance in his current loadout. Maybe its just me but it feels like I'm watching a 10 minute youtube video explaining bullshit for 9 minutes before it goes on the actual topic of the video for the last minute. The chapters now are less engaging than ever, and it feels like a lot of people are agreeing with me. if we compare the chapter comments from the first 100 chapters, and now. it feels like the whole novel turned into a factory with mindless workers reading and an author who has burned out. Do not get me wrong, im not saying the book is bad, im saying there is no more Martial art, but more "world building/exposition". Its great to flesh out the world, but I couldnt give two flying fucks about the longranger sect and their mission to power up, while the mc could have powered up twice with two new techniques in the same timespan he spent on that fucking island doing NOTHING. and to top it off, he gets to upgrade an already op technique which will ruin the balance of his current "lacking arsenal" of techniques which are unique to him. YOURE TELLING ME, I READ 100+ chapters of a boring ass hell arc only for him to upgrade his pathfinder. instead of getting a better striking technique since he lacks in striking and diversity, his grappling has been MAJORLY FORGOTTEN FOR LIKE 600 CHAPTERS. lets not talk about his symbiote, i guess its now non existent and wont eat his mind. like, yeah. definitely. how come he didnt get into any hypnotic techniques when he was frothing from his mouth when he saw it in the actually good and entertaining championship arc. Either way, This is my take on the current development of the book and how its slowly devolving from its roots.
a cool technique he might be bale to learn is magnetic sense. its a sense that some animals posses, and also us humans, but unfortunately we cant harness it, even if we have the necessary organ.
Because the author doesn't think of improving his own craft, and instead he seems to be living in his own little world. that answers all your issues with the FF.
nah, a martial master B)
"Fu fu fu... I wonder if he'll strive to become a Martial Artist..."
The Martial Unity
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patience is key. worry not you shall find passion through effort.
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original Generic Incarnation.
The planet of Garius, its a paradise for some, hell for others, but almost everyone can agree on one thing, you can live however you want, while its true that the world might seem good, it has its own set of issues, one of them is the imminent threat of Corruption and its spawns who are looming over the small planet, ready to devour it. It would be easy for the small planet to fight against the incomprehensible threat, the only problem, the races dont get along and all the heroes who knew of the looming threat died mysteriously a few millennia ago. Fortunately for the little planet, there is still hope in the form of a young man who at the moment is soundly sleeping in a king sized bed which is located inside a huge mansion.18 Chs 1 คอลเลกชัน
it seems rui is getting dumber the stronger he gets, the rui from even the apprentice realm would have noticed his opponent trying to trap him, i guess his own arrogance got the better of him, he didnt predict that the bullrushes where a trap since he didnt think the old man would actually try to trap him.
The Martial Unity
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