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A guy sacrificed his life to save many others got found himself in front of a pc in a black and white room saying you got a chance to live again in DC universe world
I don't own DC or marvel or ant of their characters except my OC. I am just making a work of fiction for enjoyment
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เขียนรีวิวwell I'll say it has a potential i mean a lot of potential sadly it has poor execution no build up for characters, and super fast pace which is good if done right but like i say poor execution and no build up for the character's which is understandable because it'll probably be drop sooner or later i think but it's too early for me to give a permanent raye so I'll probably delete or change this if it got more chapter's
Not many chapters yet so don’t go only off this review. There are plenty of grammar and syntax mistakes. This is annoying but the story is still understandable and readable. The updates occur decently for now. The story itself needs a lot of work. The author is just throwing stuff out there as fast as possible forcing the story to jump forward to fast. Plan key points in your storyline and add details between to make it like he is living and there is more to the world. The characters are very basic, no personalities. There are essentially no world background or environmental descriptions. Essentially it’s just has a forced and rushed feel. Slow down and plan better. Add stuff into chapters between key events. Don’t have someone say they don’t feel much about the loss of parents and then stop eating, that is an emotional response to loss so it doesn’t make sense.
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