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Max a boy that lived with his parents. After resuming school one week after was his birthday on that same day he discovered that someone killed his parents and he wants revenge but when he discovered that it was his uncle that he loved dearly.Nothing could stop him from the hatred he felt for his uncle so he still wanted revenge and he got his uncle arrested but he escapes and that made Max more angry but Max later found out that it was not really his uncle that killed his parents. Something happens to Max but you have to read it if you want to know what happens next.
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I loved the description. The characters are so adorable. I'll be keeping watch on this story. I want to see what happens next. I would recommend it.
Author, I loved your story, it's obvious that there is potential, lots of potential, seeping from your novel. The only thing lacking is um, how do I say this? Ah yes, a narrative technique. It's evident from the synopsis that you lack a narrative technique. Please don't treat this as criticism, merely feedback to make your story even better! I love the concept, the worldbuilding, but the story could use some descriptions. For a beginning author, your writing is quite good, and I believe you should keep writing because practice makes perfect :) Good luck and kudos to you!
The story is cool and I can say that it was passable. Grammar is fine and also its narration. The flow too! Good job and keep it up! [img=angry]
This book has so much potential! The writing is so choppy and I'm not sure how to describe it, but I'm sure it will only get better as the story progresses. I've only read the first chapter, but I'm confident that the author will continue to improve and make this book even more amazing! Here's to hoping for a witty and joyful journey!
Good story, the plot is interesting and the characters are well developed. Still, I want to give you a few tips from a fellow author that can imho improve your writing... Try to drop the "he said," and "she said" in every dialogue line it's kind of distracting. Another thing is you should focus less on every mundane thing that Max does - remember you are writing a novel, not a journal. So focus primarily on things important for the plotline. But overall I think it has potential so keep writing!
I recently had the opportunity to delve into your work, and I commend your effort in creating a captivating narrative. However, I would like to offer a constructive review that highlights the need for further refinement and increased engagement within the story. While your writing style is commendable, there is room for improvement in terms of making the work more attractive and heightening the suspense that your piece demands. Just sharing my opinion and for sure your work is adorable, just keep going.
Good Book, Please keep up the good work. It has the potential to become a great story!
The first chapter was good. It made me want more but sadly, that eas the only chapter. Good job!👍👍
I genuinely enjoyed the story. There are no grave mistakes in writing, so there was nothing what would disturb me while I was trying to focus on the story. It’s kinda sweet and I took a liking in Max, you can say it’s a well written character.
Till now I liked the book. Writing quality is good and simple. The lead characters are strong. And the story is really unique. Waiting for the new chapters.
Loving this alot .It looks script-like but it's still fine . It's interesting and the characters are interesting as well. Highly recommended to everyone 🤭❤️❤️❤️❤️
I really like the novel it's pretty great the beginning is good and I like the world building ☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️🥹🥹🥹🥹🥹☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️
I love everything about this book, the book is well written, I can’t wait for the new chapter, author you’re amazing,keep on writing👍
The story has potential and the characters are decent. It lacks descriptions and emotions a little bit but I hope the author will improve it
A slice of life that suddenly takes a drastic turn. Creative and unique. I really like it.
I love the story so far and it got me intrigued as to what's going to happen next. Keep the updates coming
There's so much potential in this novel! I'm not sure how to characterize it, but I'm confident that it will improve as the story goes on. Even though I've only read the first chapter, I have no doubt that the author will keep writing better chapters to make this book even better! Let's hope for a clever and enjoyable voyage! The first few chapters had a feeling of being about everyday life.