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Welp this is my first novel , I just want to see how this little experiment will go.
A 18 year old guy follows his path , building his future with the help of a system.
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It is an enjoyable read. slice of life vibe is nice and it is satisfying. things could be better with the writing but I think my main concern is how you mix up dialogue in the body of narration. it makes it difficult to read. of course sometimes yoj can power through but some people can not. place Dialogues on separate lines from the narration of the story and it will read so much better.
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It was bad, It is bad, it will be bad, the chapters is too short bad grammar used has instead of as many time the author didn't care to fix it so no future development in this book