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The Iron Chain - The importance of perspective of ego
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Imagine waking up in a robotic body with your memories half destroyed. Finding out that you are in a hostile land of fantasy and magic with little means of communication or survival. And the only hope you have is to track down random signals that have a chance of leading you to upgrades, allies, traps and or enemies.
Luckily for Nick, he wont do all that alone. Along with his companion Hasso, they will work hard for the answers they seek.
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Honest review here for ya. Your story has a good basis and a lot of potential to work with. Main detracting points are just repetitve use of vocabulary and sentence structure can be a little abrupt, choppy. One thing that I noticed you do really well is remembering to describe things in detail. Letting your reader understand what you are potraying is key in a good story, so props to you for that. Character design is alright so far, but I would say that his emotions could be a little more erratic at the beginning. Even if you wanted to stick to a more calculative feeling because he's a robot, you could have a clash of his previous emotions to his logical robotic side. World background also looks good and seems to have a lot of directions to take the story. Keep up the good work author!
First of all, I really the concept of the story. I am quite a big fan of sci-fi, so this was an enjoyable read. I wish you'd develop a bit more certain ideas, because I feel like it's moving too fast from one idea to another, and that takes me a little out of the story. Also, in some chapters there is a lot of dialogue. This is not a bad thing, but I think it should be a bit more balanced with the description, with the inner thoughts of the character, to give it more depth. I consider that too much dialogue, without breaks, is a little tiring and difficult to assimilate. Of course, that's up to my preferences. Overall, you're doing a great job so keep it up!
After reading the synopsis, I was instantly hooked; and when I started reading the story I was amazed by how the author was able to create a very interesting world set up. KUDOS!
I like how the story started and continued reading further. Writing Quality: The author's writing style is well written. But there are a few minor errors that could be fixed by the author. Stability of Updates: Here I cannot say much. But I just hope the author updates per week or daily. So, that readers don't lose interest in the story. It's up to him/her. Story development: I will not say much here because the story just started now. I really hope the story does wonders in the upcoming chapters. Character design & World background: I would say that the two main protagonists were well portrayed throughout the chapters. I hope the background could improve more in the upcoming chapters. Overall, I would say that the storyline is interesting and I hope it reaches great heights. Keep up the Good work, Author!
This review is after the first two chapters. The writing quality is alright. Some mistakes here and there, but they don't hamper the reading experience too much. I like the concept of a robot in a fantasy world that needs upgrades to become strong. Just imagine what kinds of upgrades he'll have later in the story. I think that's exciting. Great job.
Very nice story! After reading the synopsis and the first few chapters, I was thinking this novel was right up my alley. Too bad there are only six chapters at the moment. I hope the author will continue to release more chapters and we will see how the story develops. Overall, good job! P.S. -- I gave you one power stone for the encouragement! :)
The grammar and punctuation are really good. There were only a few spelling errors her and there. There isn't much story development yet, but it's interesting so far. The character design is also interesting. There's a mix of human and robot within the main characters mind. I wonder what his true identity is, how he came to this different world and why he ended up as a robot.
This review is after reading the first chapter. Good short premise. The writing quality is great, albeit with minor grammar issues that I spotted, but no big deal. I really like the character development that the author is taking his time to build. The world in its self is mysterious which I like. Keep up the good work.
Okay, so that was a very interesting premise. Kind of unique if you ask me. The dialogue and actions flow smoothly giving a pleasant read. There isn't a lot I can talk about right now as there are only a few chapters, but the author put in a lot of thoughts into developing the robots. He clearly explains the functions which is a big plus for me. Keep up the good work. :D
This story is lit! With a talented author, this novel was in good hands. I gotta say I'm impressed! Accompanied with hard work and perseverance, this will pave well in the future! Good luck author and may your novel be blessed with more readers!
I have read all the chapters so that I can do this review. I enjoyed reading your story that ill add it to my collections. The writing style is great. Also make sure to fix some minimal errors that sometimes are hard to see, But the story is good and I hope to read the next chapter once its released. So keep up the good work and stay motivated!
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At first, I was like damn, but then as I read, I got more hooked. kinda sad though that it's only 3 chapters. dear author, please update more chapters soon
Even though this is only two chapters so far I love what I am reading. There are many questions that need answering and so I am inclined to keep reading. I do enjoy the mystery of the robotic protagonist not remembering anything about his past or how he ended up in world he is, but appears to have once been a human. I'm sure this will be explored and the mysteries all unraveled later in the story. I'm also eager to see him explore the new world he finds himself on. From a technical standpoint, the author writes really well and has a natural flow to his prose. I think this one could go on to do big things in the future. I will be back to read soon when there are a few more chapters up.
A really enjoyable read! The story is descriptive and immersive, and the author does a good job of creating a prolonged feeling of mystery and unknown throughout the writing. A great Sci-fi, and I think if you are a Detroit become human fan this would also suit your preference very well! Fab story telling! I look forward to reading more when it next uploads! Keep up the great work!
Really enjoying so far reading this story and it has great potential! I definitely give props to the author after writing this story! Keep up the good work!
Oh, I'm first here. Now review proper, Writing Quality: There are a few grammatical errors but nothing much to stop you from enjoying reading the story. Stability of updates: I will not say anything much here. Just take your time honing each of your chapters since this is still starting. Story Development: Since it has a few chapters, I can't say much here for now. But the start and the meet-up of the two main characters flow smoothly which is already a plus. The characters along with the world background could be fleshed up more to the incoming chapters. Overall, this is already brimming with lots of potentials along with the interesting plot the author has got for this. This will stay in my collections and see how this one will develop and grow. Keep it up, author!