The hidden Secrets (Rwby fanfic)

I get it you're new to writing stories but you gotta fix it i mean its all over the place the story is quite chaotic and full of cuts like come on. the guy is bleeding then what did he do he goes to the library saying he knows what he's doing, then suddenly he's at the mall with stealing with his inventory like when did he have that?! and somehow he outrun trained huntsman which reminds you they are fast as hell while being in a body of a kid and injured. then next he's at juniors with the twins? like come on man not trying to bash or anything im just saying so you could write better you need to give people the details and story progression not full of cuts like that. you may have the story clear in your head but not to us readers