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The Doom Slayer in a Different Universe
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Cover does not belong to me it belongs to its respectful owner. After kicking the shit out of The Icon of Sin the Doom Slayer went back to the Doom Fortress, there he planed to go to hell for his quest of pure undying, eternal hatred against the forces of hell. Unknown to him, he was sent not into hell but somewhere where it NEEDS a Slayer of its own...
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- คุณภาพงานเขียน
- ความเสถียรของการอัปเดต
- การดำเนินเรื่อง
- กาสร้างตัวละคร
- พื้นหลังโลก
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Writing quality is good, fast paced. Story is soft at the earlier chapters Some parts are a bit forced as some paragraphs does not really have a smooth flow - the flow somewhat smooths out around chapter 20 Characters are OOC, some are cringey in their dialogues Plot holes are not plenty but there's a lot World background is good This: Tyrian Callows: AAAGGGHHHH!!! DAMN IT!!!!! Should be changed with this: "AAAGGGHHHH!!! DAMN IT!!!!!" Why? Because this is not a script It also becomes redundant as the next paragraph has the identifier for the dialogue. It will also help smooth out the flow further
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I think that this story is very good and that the author deserves many props for making it. As a new author myself I salute this guy for being able to do what he does. One piece of advice is that if you make another fan-fiction try RWBY x God Eater (tv show)
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