Shattered Innocence: Transmigrated Into a Novel as an Extra

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Darkness_Enjoyer

Hello, Author here. In this thread, I will clarify some questions regarding the start of the book, and you can treat it as a Q&A as well. Firstly, the novel will seem a little odd to you at the start since it starts differently. But, I must insist that you read the free chapters, the first volume, until the end and bear with it a little since it is just an introduction to the work. I know at the start of the novel, Lucavion doesn't start as your typical main character of such novels, which is something I intended since, at the start of the novel, the main character is 14 years old and mentally unstable due to all the events surrounding him. Even though I know it may be frustrating to read a little, I also think that it is an accurate description of how a person who was put into such a position would think at those moments and the type of psychology that they would have. However, at the end of the first volume, his mentality and everything will have undergone a huge change, making it a lot more readable, and from then on, the story will stretch with many interpersonal relationships going on. For now, this is all I have to say about the book, and you may continue with your questions here. I will answer them if I can.

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Dieudonner_17

Writing quality is superb Updating stability nothing to say Story and character development. If there were tragedy and slow paced tags I won’t be frustrated 49 chapters in and mc is still canon fodder The frustration is just killing me Everyone seems to bully mc alone and despite his so called star devouring (spoiler) some rank 3 bozo is like heaven while he’s earth(apparently not as talented it’s made to be) If you like slow paced novels where mc is traumatized in more than 30 chapters while growing like a snail this book is for you

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thePRIEST

Bruh if you are going to write by using A.I. then make it less obvious. I am 43 chapters in, and it is painful how all the internal monologues are just repeated ideas in different wording. When other characters face off, like in chap 43, then it is obvious that an A.I. is narrating the emotions and dialogue. If you are not using A.I. then you are simply overdoing it - there are better ways to describe character emotions and development.

The writing is good and all, I actually really like the background and story progression since it seems to stray from the op mc cliche; however, there are firstly, some fillers that I cannot understand why they're there other than to make the readers irritated. On top of that, the novel doesn't need the transmigration tag because for as long as I read, few dozens chapters in, you could've removed the transmigration tag and the introduction chapter, and it would be the exact same thing, like there would be no major differences whatsoever. The tag itself feels like a cheap attempt at clickbaiting that unfortunately worked, reading this novel, for me, was like having fishbone stuck in your throat-- Like I know it supposed to be a tragedy and all, I can perfectly comprehend that, but at least, AT LEAST, makes it so that the transmigrator is actually unique somewhat compared to the native denizens.

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radioactive_jig0l0

man!!! the story would have been perfect with some revenge but author made the MC too soft. ruined the story for me and what's the point of reincarnation when he no longer remembers his old memories

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Lazy_Pen_Master

five star from me, cuz why not. i enjoyed both of authors previous works. all the best for this book also.

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Alikareem_Fatemi

I may be biased due to reading the author other works (Hunter Academy: Revenge of the Weakest) This is very good start. Still too early to give my full thoughts of the story but from knowing the author previous work I know I'm going to love this story. One thing I love what the author does is he takes his time with the main character development and power level. I am so tired of reading a op main character who barley worked hard to obtain their power. shattered innocents we see the mc struggle and I am so excited to see how he will prevail and get back at everyone who wronged him. Maybe I'm just odd but I like seeing a main character who we see starts at the bottom and crawl their way to the top. Overall, I'm quite excited to see how this story will unravel. i do hope the author will have the main character have guy friends (I do not mean Bl lol) Typically with stories with harems the mc only surrounded by women. They don't have guy friends if they do it's like comedy relief. I hope I explain that well like I want the mc having his own group his bros. I hope explained what I thought well this was my first time writing a review so if I made a mistake cut me some slack.

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Kiev_Royle

Author , I understand that the MC and FMC were meticulously set up, but how could their ,especially her family could just brand them as guilty without any apprant investigation in context of the world you yourself wrote. This is a magical and clearly cutthroat world where things like lust potion, mind control existing wouldn't raise anyone's eyebrow. Elara and Lucavion didn't seem to have any contact beforehand. Considering elara established noble character , it makes more sense to assume she wasn't at least consenting when she says so. Also dude was clearly vomiting again and out of it ,at least someone should have a susposcion of foul play this is assuming powerful duke cant even fanthom means to detect if someones been drugged. Literally everyone , their families, the lawmakers of the country and even the Mc and Fmc themselves, need to be braindead for this to work. I'm not saying they should become clean and lived happily ever after, I'm simply disappointed that zero effort was put to anything .

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Shuvro_Majumder

Bro, have you really given up on EROTIC RPG ??you took a new novel ,which you are going to update 1 chapter everyday . But you haven't updated a single chapter of erotic rpg for 6 month straight. Now you are treating it like middle child .

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Anonymous_Boiii_69

Sigh again another good novel yet ruined by the MC’s personality. Apparently a whole grown man acts like a manchild. Gets “red faced” approaching probably younger women than him. This is getting cringier and cringier with chapters. I expected a more cold,calculative,ruthless approach not some “Lost child depressive stupidity” approach

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InSC

My hunch this novel will be dropped by author at around 300ish chapter, the same author other novel, "erotic rpg" for example...

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SYED_AFAQ

author is there any type of Yuri or ntr in it I hope not

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Noah_234

Author, This is best novel from your collection and story is also good with how our MC is getting strong by hard work and slowly. Consider yourself very lucky as I don't review and i am making exception for you...

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Leo_Lee69

I could only last around 10 chapters the MC is unrealisticly Solf and folds in every way, also I find it hard to believe someone on a lvl of a duke would fall for such a easy scheme especially because they 2 people involved would be a farthest form the people who would do that. Not to mention they are both loopy on the stuff still so it’s not hard to imagine fualplay being involved. And lastly I like how both families basically throw them under the bus so to speak, yes it’s realistic but nonetheless it’s a bit sad. So in the end I can’t bother reading more with an Mc like this tho it might get better that’s not something I’m willing to bet on.

VERY GOOD, wonderful, hope it continues to get better and better n more better so that I can read more, the story resonates so well... the author knows what he's writing and so many principles can be applied in real life

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Verhovin

Absolutely love it. Nice mc development, creative plot, some fresh ideas. Characters? Some of them are 1-D, yep, but i think there was not enough screen time.

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Slj91

Hello all, I’ll try to make a quick summary of pros and cons for everyone who is about to start reading: Pros: 1) interesting take on Isekai, it uses the standards troupes without being repetitive; 2) interesting and captivating characters; 3) consistent chapters releases 4) the plot armor up to this pint hasn’t been anything OP, allowing character development without major and quick power ups or power of friendship - huge plus on my opinion. Cons: 1) the writing style gets boring and repetitive rather quickly. The author over explain things on every paragraph. Sometimes you spend two chapters that are basicly inner monologues instead of story progression. 2) additionally to the pint above, the author try to write the story with an excess of mysticism even when it’s unecessary. Not everything needs to be analyzed as if they were on a psychiatric appointment or reading their fate upon the starts; 3) the power scales are still strange to me. We understand very little of the power system or its inner works and we are already almost 200 chapters in. Overall is a nice novel to spend time but it needs a lot of rework to be a really GOOD one. But as quality goes on Webnovel, it’s above standard. Good luck author!

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ghostman

You protray the character devlopment really well. It isn’t the same book where the mc kills and than all of a sudden turns into a killing machine. But the MC showed humanity and emotions in the beginning and than breaking slowly and getting reshaped into something diffrent from a normal persons psyche. Of course being a 14 year old killing other people everyday would do something to you. Like being in a situation that’s to much for you to handle, what do you do? Sorta like the guts and Griffith situation but less messed up and more real. I really like how you make your devlopment. Reminds me of a manhwa ‘fight class 3’ Jiu Ji Tae( you should check it out.)

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Noctum47

Thanks Author, I love this story. I can't wait for my boy Lucarion to get his get back.