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Naruto
Reincarnated system!
When I walked into the living room I saw a man with glowing green eyes sitting on the couch and my mother and father dead on the ground at his feet. The man said to me 'I've come for my sweet little kitty kitty'
BL don't like don't read its not for you! Mentor Kakashi, OC/Itachi
No One 17 and Under Admitted
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- คุณภาพงานเขียน
- ความเสถียรของการอัปเดต
- การดำเนินเรื่อง
- กาสร้างตัวละคร
- พื้นหลังโลก
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Loving the first chapter so far and looking forward to see what you have written so far and looking forward to see what you do with the story!
The best Review advice I can give the writer is to look over the words again to make sure they are spelled correctly. Like the word cool was spelled as 'kool' in this story, it sounds right but isn't spelled right so it kind of throws the story off a bit for the readers. I like the story but I think it may be moving a bit too fast, like, slow down and try to use descriptions more. Try not to just gloss over things like the bloodline creation, it could have used more descriptions - readers like me enjoy reading the options provided to the MC and what the MC will choose. Thanks for the story!