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this is my second story i hope this will be better than previous one. I think I have improved from my previous story.
this story is about a boy who was a test subject later a tool to be used by his master. See till the end how the boy changes his life even if he was just a tool.
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not interested then don't read i don't wanna waste your time. The entry of lookism character will be later in coming chapters. in first few it will be about number 8 childhood more like a hell time.
hope you enjoy this story and wish me luck and i hate LGBTQ stories fuck the Wattpad fanfics. they ruined my entire view of lookism
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It is interesting and i like the addition of glory and killer peter but the name changes or pov swaps or whatever you are doing makes it very hard to understand who and what you are talking about u went from number 8 to luke (which was fine) but then michael with no explanation
It's not looking too good. For the better I suggest you drop this before you waste anymore of your time writing any further. To improve you need to get rid of the pov switching by only using third pov, fix your Grammar, add more and better dialogues with better explanation. To get an idea, check out other good lookism fics. Other than that,