Harry Potter and the Heir to Grindelwald

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amaturewriter

GOD DAMN!,,,so far its dope...like theres not much but its definetly interesting...SI as grandson of grindle...The MC is semi OP..meaning smart and powerful just needs to train..new lore [ideas]..well written...dope..plus the pic..its cool.. Author bro....evil MC's done well are always dope..but avoid making a nut case that just causes chaos....or just wants to build a harem...or just does random **** like world domination only to destroy it....give MC a purpose....make him dark..or neutral,,not evil,,,[most] people dont like reading dark **** like rape or pointless murder.......make him OP...also add some romance and fluff..but no mind rape or forced **** or just any shallow romance......do build it and try to keep it happy..to balance out MC's darkness?..if harem keep it small... .**: would be cool MC hides his identity and reveals it later..meaning-pretty sure people would discriminate against him or want him dead cause who he is...also could be revealed in surprise to create dope moment..just saying.....also add some bash but make it sensible...ex: dont bash snape because he is snape..dude was a cunt..but probably one of the greatest and saddest characters to live..... Could make this an AU where HP's family survived? and has family...'[could be used for bash also..] [bash is optional] Pairing: Daphne? Luna? OC [ie: If an AU then maybe a potter daughter? Anyway goodluck and goodshow!

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DANIEL_LESAN

Great fanfic, I'm loving it, but here are a couple of ideas I wonder what the MC will do with the horocrux. I don't think he gets too involved, the only thing that would interfere with it doesn't matter what Ravenclaw's diadem would take over and purify it. Grinderwald's "main" quality is supposed to be Ravenclaw (Thirsty for information and knowledge). I think a quality like that would be attached to the MC. And an mental type / knowledge artifact such as the diadem is a treasure on par with old libraries, which seize no matter what. In addition to the room of lost things and objects (lost / forbidden knowledge) and large quantities of artifacts in addition to the ability to request and then copy the books of the forbidden section and the director's private library. The chamber of secrets surely didn't have just one huge snake. Then something that I have seen little in the fanfiction is that I use the 7 years of hogwarts to create a network of information and / or spyes. The mark of voldemort (I don't know the name of that magic) is immensely usefull, a way of communicating with each other without being too obvious and leaving no (obvious) traces. A test of confidence to the best or most loyal (most powerful, wise, or with special talents such as parselmouth, metamorf, seers, elementary, etc.) its not necessary to make the voldemort way, after all the MC is not likely to follow the path of the sociopath, that usually goes wrong. With the usual hero emerging with his untouchable plot armor (a prophecy for example XDDDDD). You have Morgana to be the most loyal and her shadow, you have well inserted Hermione who is overwhelmingly intelligent and when she is disappointed with the authority and knows the laws concerning pureblood and muggleborn would see how her future career would develop and if she does not marry a pureblood (BLEEERGH Ron) would end quite badly, joining the MC would be a better option apart from marrying Harry (a child damaged by 10 years of abuse who could not recognize anything but a sister), then the MC could love her xd, Luna has its peculiarities, and has an incredible lateral thinking in addition to being a sighted part (nargles and such) as long as he stays close to her or her side will always be loyal, Daphne Greengras, pureblood and her family is from the neutral faction of the wizemagiot too incredibly intelligent, in addition to having great political / economic sense (at least according to ALMOST all the fans), Fleur / Gabrielle are daughters of a high French official if he was not yet a minister besides d and represent Veela, a race in itself (I think her grandmother was one of the leaders of a veela enclave), Padma / Parvati are from one of the oldest families I think that 4000 years (that also usually means extremely powerful) of the India, Cho Chang the same but with China (I think but not so old), ALL these ladies are very intelligent, and if you train them personally, very powerful and can greatly help the MC, by the way you can enchant them and make them your ladies. At least Hermione (the magical world would destroy her if she didn't join the MC) and Luna she would be very powerful, her abilities are too useful (her creatures told her things she isn't supposed to know normally) besides that it would be relatively easy to have his full loyalty (I will not say love because a woman's heart is too complex for us humble mortals) Regarding animagus I don't have many ideas, you have a black fenix and wand with thestral tail, I don't think the Mc is completely dark so I would put something neutral-light, nothing like a normal fenix that its too much. I would always say (even by personal preference) a Thunderbird, they are fucking awesome, and I have read that they used to be considered as heralds of war, if that **** is not impressive I don't know what it is. Thin about it Voldemort-snake Dumbeldore-fenix Harry-drake/deer and the MC-Thunderbird If you have read this far, I hope I have not made you waste too much time on your life span XDDD, that is all I can think of or I have been able to write about your story. If you have not understood everything I am sorry but English is not my first language. BYE

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_AlexZander_

I don’t want to write anything, just read it.

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Delthar

Basically it became unreadable for me at chapter 8, when Flamel (not Flamencu) gave him some masterpiece wand capable of transforming to a wand after finding a random beggar girl/witch named Morgana. Sentences and wrong wording are found everywhere in the chapters, story development was in question after first chapter already (Obscurial being in control and being Grindewald's grandson). Also instead of being imprisoned in his cell in Nurmengarnd, it is a proper castle with Grindewald walking around. Character is also designed poorly. He's reincarnated Mr. Perfect, with a cold face and "beautiful" looks. From authors words I would say he's the perfect trap material ever born as long as he wears girly clothes. All I know about him is that he's reincarnated person, has a desire to be revolutionist like Grindewald, has no problem with threatening people with death, etc. Basically he just ignores his first life in favor of authors plot. Also I can already tell that the guy is going to be some kind of Merlin reborn with Morgana actually being his yandere lover or something along those lines from early chapters. Rating 4.9 also tells me that he's deleting all lover than 4.5 ratings (****ty system that allows authors to delete all rating they don't like.).

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verethragna21

I really like where this is going I just hope he doesn't take the Voldemort route when dealing with people. like dark marks and allows rape and murdering of children and babies.

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LeyMerSen

Author, please update. Hope you're not dead. I really like the story withthe semi OP MC. Cool, smart, and everything good. Please update, it's been a year.

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Odnum96

Esta muy interesante, espero seguir viendo cómo se desarrollará el personaje.................................................................

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Isaiah_1217

The way how the MC composes himself around as well the description of what he wears and his charisma like Gellert Grindelwald along with the kind of Wand and what it's made of is quite interesting more so intriguing when u add the black Phoenix definitely cant wait to read more look forward for when ur able to get the chance

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Asura_Yuuki

Ansiosa estou. .

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LeyMerSen

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ArtoriaPendragon_

Really good PLEASE DON’T DROP AND PLEASE UPDATE AGAIN

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Mohd_Zulhilmi_90

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Mohd_Zulhilmi_90

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lena2000

I just love this fanfic its soo different from other Harry Potter fanfictions I love both the Male and female main characters as well they both are soo good together

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SSS_Class_Reader

One of the finest work I ever read , at the end of 1st chapter I knew this novel was lit,I will curse your next 7 generation of descendants to be ugly duckling if u drop this novel,

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Daoist721221

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GrandMaster_69

Hey Author, please update this novel... I would very much like to read this novel.... I'm waiting for the chapters.... Please update soon... Thank you

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Ha_Kun

Very nice characters and plot development. Story line is smooth flowing. Only problem with newbie writers is to Keep up to regular updates, and no good idea for new chapters. Please try to write many chapters in single day to make the flow fluent and update chapters with with the per day or per week rules so the update rate don't drop and you can have more time to think of good story line and daily activities in your irl. Hope you are well during the COVID 19 outbreak. Please try to upload upto at least 50 chaps so that we don't have to see another good story die prematurely. Thank you.

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DAVID

Updated more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!