it's officially scrapped as a chapter
If you guys don't like a rewrite of part two I'm doing something wrong. So fuck it, I'm restarting the chapter, I am rethinking everything that happens because of this.
If you guys still don't like even that then I'll either have no choice but to scrap this or rewrite it entirely. Let's hope it gets un-fucked by no less than half of how fucked it is.
See you then
SEPTEMBER 4TH UPDATE:
So I am going to try and provide daily updates as best I can that will keep you guys apprised. I want to keep the fight scene, but I believe that I have found a way to satisfy everyone with that. I also plan on keeping that bit with Tywin, but only after a few adjustments. Other than that it's a clean slate.
Let me be up front with this and say Fight Scenes aren't my Forte, if this was a DxD, Pokémon, Dragon Age, Star Wars, or Mass Effect Story I'd have little issues writing them. Now I do have Swords on my Wall, and believe it or not I'm going to be using Star Wars Lightsaber Combat Forms as a Solution. No Force or Telekinesis, just the Bladework.
Anyway right now I'm going to keep at writing this next chapter. Don't worry, if he has to lose something it'd maybe be either some of eyesight or something. But that's just an example and not what will happen right nor or whatever, so no need to worry on that front.
Also I am considering making a fanon article for Barthogan on the GoT fanon Wiki on Fandom. But for the most part, this next chapter will have to be the primary focus. In other news, that Star Wars story I published recently? That was originally on Fanfiction.Net so no need to worry about splitting my focus on three different stories. I only posted it because my Cousin will be launching a Story in his Four Wishes Series he's working on and me and him will be writing competitively. But as I said, this is one of my two Main priorities.
SEPTEMBER 5TH UPDATE:
Got a few research related things to do that will help solidify the plot. Other than that not a lot to report.
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