GOT- Elf between worlds

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Xiphos_Gladius_03

The story seems to have the potential to grow into so much more. If you're worried about your grammer, I suggest you use grammarly, which is free to download, and it will help you improve your writing. Good luck with the fanfic 🍀

At first, I found the writing a little difficult to understand, but over the chapters, the author managed to improve, don't stop writing this novel. !!

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Paralelo_name

Please don't stop, I really liked the story, but please go deeper and try to make the story a little slower, I repeat again don't stop with this story !!!

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WintyLP

nice

LV 4

Newnoob

Tbh the story is good has potential but it just needs some refining. Overall everything is okay except the writing style. I personally found it stale/bland and you can say outright annoying. I'm not trying to downgrade it or something but if I can advise anything to author, it would be to write the story normally like every other authors usually do. Instead of only filling the chapters with conversation between characters and that too in 10s of paragraph, I would suggest writing it in a whole paragraph. Also the POVs change is too frequent, like within 500 words the POVs change 2 or 3 times. Anyways if I'm being honest it can turned into a great fic but it needs a lot of work and whole lot of beta readers to help it with the reading immersion.

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Jackleell

Overall, this story is bad. I like the concept, but everything about the story is rushed. The character interactions have no soul; you don't feel like different people are talking to each other. The way they talk to each other feels off. The spelling is also bad. Everything feels rushed; no wonder this story was abandoned.

LV 4

Oji_san_ecchi

I beg the author not to drop this novel, because in my opinion this novel can develop further with your genius thoughts about the plot of this novel, it's a shame the novel doesn't continue