Fang Yuan in The NWorld (Moved)

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FamishedGod

I believe that this is the best thing I have ever read. Don't you think so, too? Do give it a try tho, since I worked hard on this Fanfiction.

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BLANCK

I Really like it, I wonder though, is this ur original ff or are you translating it?

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Otis_Atis

The author had a good idea but poor execution. The plot is too fast and many plot holes. The cultivation system was also over exaggerated. I think picking either one instead of mixing them would have been better. However, it could be sth anyone can switch their brain and read for fun. There were some grammatical errors but not as prevalent so give it a short if you don't mind questioning the plot.

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Lucius_DeAth

Para ser original es bastante bueno, aunque me preocupa todo lo del tema de Leylin y quien sabe cuantos otros habrá por ahí, aun así me gusto bastante el concepto es interesante aunque algo caótico, el único problema que realmente veo es el Deus-Ex-Makina que son los Gu, menos mal son solo rango 1, también es extraño que Fang Yuan, compare todo con las Gu y use su mismo nombre, yo se lo hubiera cambiado, pero bueno, es tu obra.