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LV 4

Divin_Prime

Writing could have been improved..but its okay for first time writer good luck Author-san

LV 3

God_Vegeta

This is good..I won't say it's not the best. There are some grammer mistakes, but it's worth it, story development is good though, if you improve your writing quality,it will be more interesting, Good Luck author-san Try to release Batch chapters

LV 1

Thomas_45486

the story is good, but the writing didn't make it, i can understand writing is hard, i can see that you are trying to improve, keep up the good work