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Alexander Kael Touch, a self-made young billionaire, found his meteoric rise tragically cut short on a school trip. But fate had other plans, whisking him and his classmates away to a realm of swords and magic – a world where power manifested as unique: ''Gifts."
While friends awoke to magnificent Gifts, Alex's Gift yielded only two enigmatic guns: one gleaming silver, the other shrouded in black.
Worse, he couldn't use magic like his peers, drawing scorn and derision. Yet, fueled by an unyielding spirit and a burning dream, Alex refused to falter.
In this new world, he craved not wealth, but the strength to forge his own destiny. One goal burned bright: to rise once more, not to the peaks of financial power, but to the pinnacle of strength and control.
This is the chronicle of Alexander Kael Touch, the boy with two guns in a world of wonders. A tale of relentless struggle, forged in the crucible of mockery and doubt. A journey to the apex, where the scorned student will become the ultimate warrior.
Whispers of the "Death Guns Master" stir, echoes of a legend rising from slumber. The world may have forgotten them, but they are coming back.
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Nickaido's here with D-Guns, do not expect the smartest MC because he was once a billionaire, is still young, he has his flaws, he will learn and grow, so will the other characters. At the beginning other characters are stronger but worry not everything will change starting from around chapter 80 onward. Also sorry in advance because some of the female characters have strong backgrounds but it's for the sake of the future story, this book is just the start, I'm still improving.
Sorry in advance, English is not my first language, so they may be grammatical errors and misspelled words. Please bear with me. I'm trying to improve to provide a better story.
Starting from chapter 200th, I have started using Grammarly premium to help me with the English, so I think it's become better. As for the earliest chapters, I have started to re-edit them slowly; I will do more as I get more time. Maybe hire a professional editor when I can.
Once again, this is not some sophisticated story; it has many flaws, which I'm trying to learn from; however, this doesn't make the story less enjoyable. Would you please give it a try?
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The synopsis is super awesome and catchy. Going into another world which is completely different is a awesome story. The writer has also done a great job in writing the background making it more interesting.
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The concept for this story is cool but the execution just wasn't there sadly. It started out fine which minor errors in grammar but negligible. Unfortunately the relationships weren't fleshed out at all and felt forced from the start. Also the idea that the MC's gun has a mildly infuriating personality while having access to his inner thoughts irked me to no small degree. I just wish the relationships were done a little better.
This is an interesting novel to write anything about. The reason being, it is one of those novels you either love or hate. There is no middle ground for this one. Also, I want to clear this at the beginning that this is merely my impression of the book till chapter 50, NOT A REVIEW OF THE ENTIRE BOOK. Hence, Anything I say is subjected to change due to character development. Furthermore, as I am not a fan of big fan of the harem genre, it might be slightly biased regarding the harem trope. I apologize if that happens and welcome all types of correction and valid arguments(not the type saying if you don't like it, write your own book). I am pretty sure most of the readers came for this story like me, by looking at the synopsis and the promise it holds. A gun-wielding, magicless MC in a sword and sorcery isekai-world who is aiming for the top is an interesting premise. I like the world and its magic system. It's simple and easy to understand. you get everything you can hope for in a fantasy world, from sword to magic, from elf to demon, and everything in between. The magic system and leveling up are pretty straightforward and without any headache-inducing complexity. In short, the premise and the world itself are pretty solid and familiar. I want to divide the characters between MC and other characters because this particular MC needs some explanation. Other than MC, all other characters are familiar, at least if you have been around anime long enough. I am not saying they are poorly written or anything. Contrary to that they are by the book(except one) and as a result, you just don't see any unique characters. This will change in the future if the author decides to do some heavy-duty character development and some interesting backstory is added. The exception to that is Gracier IMO. I still think her attitude doesn't match her age or backstory and hope to see a major character development soon that will make her act her age. Now, I have a serious love-hate relationship with this MC. I love his demeanor and thought process during combat and hate his interaction with female characters. I would like to request everyone, especially people who aren't accustomed to a harem, not to drop it in chapter 1 when he pops up that knight talk. Things get more normal after that and around chapter 9 you can actually see a bit of character development. However, Till chapter 50 he is extremely dependant on his gun spirit regarding decision making which I don't like much. But I am hoping it will soon change as he gains more knowledge about the world and his power. TLDR: Socially MC is a garden-variety harem MC. In combat: He is intelligent, mature, and innovative. Writing style-wise author's first language might not be English. because there are quite a few miss-spelling and wrong word choices. I also noticed there are some discrepancies in certain stats. The good news is the author took notice of it and promised to fix it and hire an editor. So, no point in making an issue out of it. Lastly, give it a try. See how you feel reading it as every person has different tastes. However, if you love a typical harem MC, with familiar character types, this is a perfect read for you.
Well, if you can get past the initial 80 or so chapters, the novel is a pretty decent read. Were it not for my usual habit of reading 100 chapters before deciding whether or not to proceed, I honestly would’ve long dropped this because of the many contradictory factors/inconsistencies and the amount of frustration felt when reading a novel in which the MC didn’t feel like the protagonist in his very own story. Almost every single thing that was brought up was deemed a mystery in which it seemed like everyone else but the MC was aware of what was going on. Novel didn’t really take a turn until the MC was reborn, as in when he got the wyvern’s heart. From that point on, the novel became a lot more bearable and increasingly interesting. I like the way things are progressing as of now as nothing feels either too fast or slow, well at least in regards to the MC’s leveling up progress. Though I do feel that the plot itself could move at a somewhat slower/steady pace because I feel that too many things have happened and been thrown at us since he was “reborn”. Anyhow, even if things continue as is, I don’t have much to complain about.
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dear lord x1000000 please get an editor. dear lord x1000000 please get an editor dear lord x1000000 please get an editor dear lord x1000000 please get an editor
author I just realised something you can try to improve on or maybe you have in later chapters since in currently at 260+. The sentences or rather the way the characters speak is too formal, sometimes it feels cringy and automated, no one speaks the way they do with so many words, the way to speak and the wordings don't feel natural. I'm very adept at English (even though I know it' may not be your first language) and the conversations feel like I'm reading a Shakespeare book most times. for example in chap 278 when Alex finds out about artemias plan to use him, what he says in reply to her question was honestly just too long with so many unnecessary words in between, it's even worse for artemias reply. You should try making the way they speak more natural, using common informal English lingo and having less words while still passing the message across. Just think about contemporary English (American/British) movies and series and ask your self, if these lines were to be acted out , would they sound off to a listener/watcher or would they sound so smooth it wouldn't even look like acting, would anyone speak this way casually with so many tedious words?. I think that'll help.
After reading the novel,when I came back to check the review it does not make sense.. (May be I am wrong but Author did you deleted all the negative review?)
The concept is really good, but the writing quality is kinda messy. You need an editor author.
Personal opinion…. but author you could really condense the first 20-30 chapters as the majority of the stuff in there feels like really pointless filler. It’s a reall mental marathon getting through it. I’m going to drop this for now.
I truly like the idea and the concept of this... the beginning was very good... there were some grammatical errors but we can turn a blind eye to them... as the story progressed I feel the relation of mc a bit forced... his sudden change of personality makes me feel like he is a hypocrite and its confusing, it happened many times, the author mentioned it many times that what his aim was by (A/N) and it irked me many times because people should be able to get what you are trying to convey by reading story only... as we progressed I started feeling I was reading a low tier cultivation novel except it is a magical world... And trust me I have read my fair share of cultivation novels and I could predict what is going to happen, so my thrill ends as soon as the author tries to bring the cultivation type of deal...
I can't understand one thing is the writer's time worthless or Ours. Nearly in every chapter you get to see his full status, sometimes twice in same chapter. Writer don't you have your brain just for some point increase you write whole status window, who like to read same thing several times and also so detailed explanation about hunts and xp gain. It's a novel focus on story not numbers. Don't waste our time keep it short and simple. About the story its slow paced after reading nearly 100s of chpts my personal opinion writer is wasting words just to increase number no need for so much elaborations. Hope latter chapters are good.
its a harem so we cultured men would love to read this. sorry for my bad English, it's my 4th language
An isekai novel! This genre is my favourite. Its quite interesting how the Mc can only use guns in a fantasy world. Well this is the first time I've read a novel in first person POV. The writing quality is decent and the Author has described the thoughts of Mc very effectively. I like how the world building is done thus far. Overall a 4.8 star review for this new novel. As this is not like those typical fantasy magic novels, I recommend that readers be patient and give it a try.
hmm, the MC was always being protected by someone and not strong enough to do something by his own, i guess it was how the story Will be advance in the future, the MC Will became strong and then someone stronger Will try to attack him and again someone much stronger than the enemy Will protect the MC, and don't forget the side character that Will have bad ending, either it Will be r@pd, killed, humiliated, and along this line to wait for the MC to safe them when it was already to late, not my kind of thing so gonna drop this one, but the development of the story is great so i think most people Will like this story.......
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author, will you be elaborating on alex's life back on earth? i think that the betrayal of his bestfriend back on earth was not developed enough. (only mentioned here and there) hence, us readers could not really feel much about the reason he became the way he is. it would be nice if that part was spared a couple of chapters to explore so that you could give alex character depth just a little.
The story is really good. The characters are well developed and the author gave us plenty of background information. However, the sentence structure tends to fall apart and the pronouns tend to get mixed up, not to mention the past or present tense in some sentences will give you a headache. And to top it off the author went the privileged chapters route after only 130 chapters.
Really enjoy the story. I have some minor gripes on characters feeling somewhat flat, but nothing major. My big complaint is that the writing is sloppy. At least as of 700 chapters in. Lots of broken sentences where a key word may be missing (“Alex is ____ a masochist” where the ___ indicates a missing ‘not’). It happens way too often. Also, the status screen dumps are frustrating. I don’t to see everything. Just hilight the changes instead of pasting the entire thing and then writing a paragraph about the changes. Overall I do enjoy this story though.
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