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(Warning: This is under revision. Don't blame me if you don't understand the story)
Transferring to Tokyo after his parents died, Kazuma Fukuyama moved to the old house his parents owned and start his new life as an independent person living alone in Tokyo.
However, things will change the moment he stumbled upon a huge discovery after inputting a code that was meant to enter a group chat for his classmates in school. Instead of getting inside the group chat with his soon-to-be classmates, he found out that the people in that group chat call themselves Magicians in the group chat named Kabbalah. An accidental encounter that will soon change his life and throw him into a spiral of danger and mysticism as he will be forced to remain in the group chat and become one with them.
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Alright, Author here. I know most of you think this novel is a rip-off of Cultivation Chat Group. Well, to be informed, this novel was in the contest with the theme chat group. And this is the result of that. And please, I know you don't like weak MC but understand that the MC is never a magician to begin with, and does not have any experience becoming one so how could I explain him being able to defeat enemies easily? Cut him some slack because I can't just let him go to a strong individual with some cheat powers because the story would go boring too easily. As for the world-building, I didn't bother explaining where he was located or the current situation because it was set in modern Japan. Nothing to explain too much and I don't bother emphasize it too much since it will just be stocking words with only description of the place and I know many of you hate that. As for the chat group, its a necessary part of the story and it would be one of the key points in the future. As for goals of the MC, it's not yet decided so please wait for a bit. As for the grammar, I know I have mistakes here and there and I know that because I am not a Native English speaker so please tolerate it a bit and if there are mistakes, kindly point it to me. And as always, thank you for reading.
Your MC is a japanese guy...... Nonono😂😂 not this again i'm done you know what they say it's better to read annoying chinese MC than a P*SSY😂😂
I don't mean to send hate to the author, just making a constructive criticism, so don't be too violent and radical to comment, please. The author is very inexperienced, it seems to me a version of Cultivation Chat Group, but with magic instead of cultivation, but not so well written. When we read CCG, we are pleased to see the growth of the character, both in power scale and persona. As much as some mcs become forets and gain power, it should not be written as something so easy and explicit, there is no sense of satisfaction reading something like this. Come for free, if I can explain it that way. The dialogues seem very artificial too, just like the plot, it is a continuous dump of situations, the text has no flow, when you read something and feel that the text is fluid it is wonderful, unfortunately it does not happen here. There is no assimilation of the facts, in the matter of falling over and the MC easily and naturally accepting the situations, we do not have the process of adapting and digesting things as in GCC. I'm not going to talk about side portraits, because building the MC itself is problematic, very superficial (and no, adding a drama about it wouldn't make any improvements. The point is, we don't have a well-built character, with the psychological and differentiations, a A very good example would be the construction of Lord of Mysteries messages, this is really a very good one, use for reference). I feel no planning in writing and plot. Always keep in mind the elements of textuality: Coherence, Cohesion, Informativity, Intentionality, Acceptability, Situationality, and Intertextuality. Always review what is written and try to improve. Read a lot, because it helps, not just novels, because the construction of novels is not exemplary so to speak, I say really good book works, it helps a lot. The development of the characters must be done carefully too, try to imagine their characters and other books and novels, I can understand that there is a mind behind certain characters, as if they were a person, in others it is very superficial, sometimes Some authors and novels (many actually) tend to project themselves on the characters, especially the main ones, you are the author, not the characters, know this and create something really believable. Characters will never be the same, differentiate them and work on each other, let them grow during the narrative, mature is necessary, if not, there is a problem. The construction and actions of society and the world must be taken into account, cultural and personal habits, beliefs, religion, customs, prejudices, sexuality and gender, ways of thinking (besides that they change and are shaped by other ietns as well) . There is a lot of work, a lot of improvement to do. The novel was not to my liking and lacked in quality, I am sorry, but this is so that others do not spend time on something that will not be useful, as it was not for me. There was no real criticism when I looked at the comments, so I had to read to find out. More criticism is needed (better than mine and well written reviews by readers in all the nines, so that we can evaluate better than comments on how we liked it, love it, exp, thank you and comments that don't really appeal to us that we are looking for something solid to take as a reference). Very annoying to write this, but I felt I should. I realize my comment was not as well written as it should have been, but I was tired. Sorry if I offended anyone, but I don't feel sorry for the message.
Very good novel, i'd loved to be a mc, and i see that will be harem. Its doesnt suit my taste but i will try to overcome this if you dont do ****. Its seems modeled as cultivation chat group and i have high hopes for this novel. Thanks for your hard work autor!
The grammar is a little poor yet tolerable, they say a few things on what the character looks like, for world building they say the they building yet never go over the background. For people who have never been there it's hard to picture the surroundings with little detail about it. Other than that the MC has no goals let alone a end goal.
well didn't read it and i wont cause of the wimpy beginner Japanese type guy.. to me being weak doesn't mean you have to be a wimpy or annoying type of MC. Most MC always start weak anyway.
Rated low simply for grammar and first person writing. I did this and I did that do not make for an interesting story to read. I struggled to read even the first page
I see a lot of hate for the author but you got to respect him for listening to our opinions and rewriting the story from the start even though he could have just continued
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This is a good interesting little story. Sorry Kyosea, but my three spirit stones are already committed to be split 2/1 amongst two other stories and while you've got something good, it isn't good enough to displace either of my favorites… I must say though, I very much liked the idea that some ordinary dude got an invite to a magician's chat group purely by accident… And you kinda blew that almost immediately by having your "MC" be the "Destined One" with beaucoup backstory. EE… One other thing, there has already been one case of "let's memory-wipe the mundane so they don't find out the truth…" So far as I am concerned, tampering with someone's memory is a FAR MORE REPREHENSIBLE CRIME than simply killing them. Faced with a choice—and none of these folks get a choice—"let us erase the most significant experience of your life OR we'll have to kill you…" I'd unhesitantly chose death. Altering someone's memories is a form of mental rape—and the Victorians quite properly named rape "A fate worse than death."
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I like the revised version more!! Though I only read upto chapter 49 before I noticed the revised version when I continue reading I read it was revised on author's note. Hoping for faster revised updates but I know it's a pain revising everything up to 100th and more chapters so I'll wait. Though waiting is a pain I'll endure!!! Love it to the max. Hehehe.. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
This story is great! I know lots of people out there loved the whole cultivation chat group thing but this one is seemingly just as good so far! The writing quality is good (why can’t most writers realize that “I” should be capitalized?) and the character is not completely flat like most original stories. Guaranteed there isn’t much character building yet but there’s like 12 chapters right now. But the way he interacts with the world around him stays constant and he doesn’t immediately change to some domineering individual once he becomes a magician. I hate it when stories have some meek hearted person then the moment he gets even the slightest bit of power he goes and crushes all other opposition and so far there have been 0 young master characters. So yay!
Okay, the updates in order make no sense. You went back and edited your story and it caused the chapters to go from talking to a teacher to fighting moonlight with a summon that we never read about.
Its medicore. Mc iritate me so much ... Autor make him look weak. And he was.. but all the time he lose battle and when he was about to die his hiden power destroy enemy.... And his charakter... He was bullied and when he got magic he new guy he forget past and accept everything like normal magic ok new guys ok mehhh.... He complett another person..
while slow it is by far one of the best chat group stories i have read love your work keep it up :) only thing i could hope for is a faster realease but as a writer myself understand both how hard and potentialy unhealthy that is but none the less love you work :)
An interesting book, and a new approach on the chatgroup type stories. fights are interesting, and I'm always waiting for the story to unfold in the new chapters. maybe as a warning that the mc has some hidden power in him that we don't know much about, but seems a OP. (casting tier 5 magic when the guy is tier 0)
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Nice writing quality Good update Good story development Good character design Nice world background !..........................................................................................!
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Once again, I am here. You see, I am running out of ideas to write in this novel, and to be honest, I know the story is bland, cliche, and boring. Yeah, even I know that. If there are still readers out there, I will be ending this story once I reach around chapter 250 or more. I specialize more on apocalypse, horror and game element genres more than fantasy. I would rather focus on my other novels rather than focus here. So everyone who have followed this until the end, thank you for reading.