/ Fantasy / Blue Star Cultivator
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An orphan from a big clan was maligned to live destitute in the outskirts of a mountain, but discovered a miracle that would change his life forever more. Follow our gravity controlling mc as he evolves from a weak individual to a powerhouse of the Aldora continent.
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I have been recently rewriting my early chapters because after the experience I gained from writing the first 100 hundred chapters the first ones looked too sloppy so I have taken the time to go back and rewrite them. New chapters will be coming soon. though
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3.85
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เขียนรีวิวIll give you my honest review so that you can improve quite a bit. WRITING QUALITY: 3 stars - It's because there a lot of grammatical errors in your story. There are some sentence fragments that doesn't complement the whole idea of your sentence, like 'Hartley woke up, he laid in bed looking at the ceiling, his muscles were sore.' in your chapter one, i will try to edit this part so that the sentences will complement on how Hartley woke up, 'Hartley woke up on the bed with his muscles sore.' just keep it plain and short when describing on how Hartley woke up. I want to remind you, chapter one gives off the first impression, you need to make your first chapter interesting and has the ability to bring in more readers. I find your first chapter not that interesting, I think, it is because on how you build the structure of your world... if you want people to imagine what you are imagining while writing, add more details with the world background.
First time reading an original story and i must say i'm so disappointed the story is force especially the part where he came back from the lou clan under the reason of gaining info to the where he stand in the world. The author could have done better than forcing the storyto revolve around the mc and the lou clan, another thing about the story that irritate me so much the way the author is making a romance without developing the story itself we only see that Ruo girl whatever her name is for aboout 2 to 3 chaptera yet the mc starting to feel something to her. As for the mc he acts way to passive and less wary of the lou clan it's like he didn't suffer to bullying and got thrown into mountain no it's far from that he is acting like a dog being acknowledged by his owner for the first time. The writting isn't needs a little fix to it the story on the other hand is too force no foundation on it the first chapter is like reading a fanfiction with a cliche writting style of pretty much just the mc recalling the events thqt lead him to the mountain. Over all review "Poor" is an understatement.
I could withstand the inconsistencies and grammar errors. But the level of absurdity made me drop this. I don’t understand how someone who’s left the materialistic world could do something so stupid? Despite his age, his mentality is that of a child incapable of understanding. I find it hard to believe that he tolerated with a dirty whore who let a women who pleased a fatty seuxally, ‘touched’ him like that.. It just shows the Writer doesn’t really care about this story...! He should be capable of knowing right from wrong, don’t give me that bullsh*t of being raised in the forest
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This is aGreat novel. I want to read more chapters. Hoping for more good chapters. This novel Wil be in a high rank if it is always updated.
When I was bored I always read a novel to entertain my self. This story is great if the author put more effort to the dialog of the characters. The story is very nice. I like it.
Does this story have a little problem? Yes, but that can all be overlooked because the problems are minor. The story follows an MC that has the power of time and gravity. It is a well rounded story that is just getting started. I look forward to where the author takes us.
Sorry to say that this book isn't great. I like the Gravity/Time concepts, but the MC is lame, the english isn't good(though I've seen worse), and there are a bad mix of cliches in there. It's ok to have some cliche parts, but the author's usage of plot points cultivation levels didn't impress me. That being said, it's admirable that the author took the time and effort to do this and I hope that he/she continues to improve themselves and write better works. Thanks!
the story is interesting but the author doesn't use " " it is hard to read . ----------------------------------------------
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This novel is good but slow update whyyyyyyy6yyyyyyyyyyyyyyy author. Pls start updating regularly plsssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
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Haven't read this since I haven't had time, but browsing royalroad I noticed that someone is posting this story and I'm not sure if it is you or someone is stealing it. Just thought I'd let you know
This review is after completion of the first Volume. The story is a cultivation world that focuses on elements in higher levels of cultivation. Our MC (Hartley) is introduced with minimum information in a jungle and it seems his roots will be delved upon deeper in the story. We follow his adventures through discovery of cultivation and human interactions as he grew up alone in a jungle. His only salvation is a special cultivation energy dubbed blue energy powered by gravity that seems to baffle everyone that enables him to survive. There is system or op mentor supporting him. His approach to fighting and interactions makes the story fascinating as the author does a great job of orchestrating the fights. The first volume firms up his believes and goals as he already has few companions that he loves. No harem so far as he is still portrayed in a realistic manner of youth who is exploring with his one lover
Good overall story and plot some grammar issues and needs more updates. I hope this wasn't dropped because I like it. Don't let the critics get you down I swear some people seem to read these stories just to bash the authors.
It has many grammatical errors that are tolerable but other than that it’s a good novel that I can get into I can’t wait to see where his journey leads him
This is a really interesting story. I think if the book were edited it would really feel like a book you would pick up by an established author. I look forward to the continuation of the story. Foreshadowing suggests things won't be so easy in the future for MC, but the MC is interesting and well written. Keep up the great work!
Need improvement.. describe more details clearly about your imaginations... Realm aura, battle, situation, movement between skill, body language
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Personally, when I need a major break from life, I love reading over-top MCs. If you measure this novel with plot of against "living in a lower plane struggling to reach higher realms", then the MC's OP would not make sense. However, the author just left a clue that part of his bloodline comes from a higher plane where babies are born at Xanthian. Actually, he is weak compared to others of his bloodline. If you look at it this way, he is not overly lucky and is not really OP. Since its only 28 chapters, perhaps this just a way to introduce his back ground. Irregardless, no matter what direction the plot goes - I think it is unique, flows and is a fun read! I am looking forward to the updates (and not understanding the low reviews)!