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a god decides to play with a planet, creating a hostile environment to which they must survive. He decides that when traveling in time he decides not to make mistakes, and to be the strongest. but that is just a forgotten planet of the universal alliance (being super weak) (As we are taking time to edit the chapters this Viking will upload them as they are so that people have to read and then re-upload them edited)
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- คุณภาพงานเขียน
- ความเสถียรของการอัปเดต
- การดำเนินเรื่อง
- กาสร้างตัวละคร
- พื้นหลังโลก
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Apocalypse + system = me likey. Creativity is there but u may need to be carefull with grammar 😅. Ask someone to proofread 🤓 Keep on writing ...............
Pls try and improve your grammer too much mistakes in the sentences it gets too confusing, also the Mc is too trusting considering the fact he just got back from the apocalyse he's action and behaving no direct from the other survivors. Also he just revealed he was informed of the incoming disaster who in their right mind does that, the atitude of the teacher changed too quickly she went from teacher to a love struck 16yr old also the Mental condition of the mc went from 50yrs apocalyse survivor to a boy playing WOW
Seems interesting but main character is sometimes call he and other times she making it very confusing about the main characters gender. The story has potential but grammar is low quality and many sentences are repetitive