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First work in which the protagonist builds a family that is really well-developed. I'm currently on chapter 22, and this work has been really well-done so far. I'm just a little worried about the future direction, considering that the protagonist will soon acquire some very strong champions, lol. It could end up losing its charm... I hope the author knows how to maintain the balance of power.
Muito bom, mas pode melhorar. ................................................................................................................................................................................................
Let's start with the writing quality: Almost everything is perfect, but since it is a translation, sometimes the names get confused, that and a few grammar errors. In the story development part, here there are problems, the story is told a little superficially, it does not go into depth, sometimes it feels like you're being told a story instead of the MC living his life, many things happen that are not explained in depth or they just happen and that's it, We could say that there are many timeskips and many sudden jumps are made in which too many important things happen and they are simply left in oblivion. There is also the problem that the secondary consciousness that he left behind is almost never spoken to, This causes many things to be emitted. In the character design part, it is quite poorly planned, the League of Legends characters almost NEVER speak, they are rarely mentioned and very rarely can it be said that they exist, For example, as far as I go in the story, Lulu spoke at the beginning and never said anything again other than a few times her spells, Of the yordles, those who have never spoken are: Teemo, Tristana, Rumble, Fizz, then Heimerdinger has spoken only once in the entire story in just one chapter. Something very similar happens with Ionia, there are almost never any mentions and they have only spoken about: Sett Yone Ahri and Karma, Karma also only in 1 chapter, it is assumed that Demacia already exists but only Quinn has appeared. I feel that in that department too much was left to be desired, the characters exist just for the sake of existing and they hardly matter in the slightest. At least the updates are decent, it's a shame that the chapters are relatively short but you understand why. Yes, I recommend reading this fanfic, but don't expect much from League of Legends, almost nothing from there.
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This was 5/5 to me. The concept was good and refreshing, the MC start as a God which is new for me. Anyway it's good and refreshing fanfic. Keep translating, translator-san, thanks😉👍
This is greate fan-fic. I recommend this norval to one who want to see system based god family making in the world of Danmachi.
Goooooooooood Danmachi novel. I'm waiting for the champions of Demacia to appear, Lux and Vayne especially. I liked that he saved Alfia, he always seemed like a character that deserved screen time and I'm waiting for him to interact with Bell
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Its very interesting concept and I like how the familia is getting together but its little too fast with bringing peaple from lol.
The fan novel is quite good and manages to highlight some pretty good implementations. It quite naturally combines elements of Danmachi and Valorant, introducing unusual dynamics that change the previously existing environment. This fusion is not only interesting. Definitely a recommended read.
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Let me be the first to give this a 5-star rating! This story is unlike any other Danmachi fanfic you've read because our MC is a god—definitely a rare concept. His children are heroes from the Valoran continent, which is based on the game League of Legends. But don’t worry! Even if you’re unfamiliar with the game, you’ll still enjoy reading this. Every character and place from the game comes with corresponding images to help you visualize what we’re talking about. That said, you can only fully enjoy this on my Patreon page since Webnovel doesn’t support the image integration. Don’t worry, though—it’s completely free!
First work in which the protagonist builds a family that is really well-developed. I'm currently on chapter 22, and this work has been really well-done so far. I'm just a little worried about the future direction, considering that the protagonist will soon acquire some very strong champions, lol. It could end up losing its charm... I hope the author knows how to maintain the balance of power.
Muito bom, mas pode melhorar. ................................................................................................................................................................................................
Let's start with the writing quality: Almost everything is perfect, but since it is a translation, sometimes the names get confused, that and a few grammar errors. In the story development part, here there are problems, the story is told a little superficially, it does not go into depth, sometimes it feels like you're being told a story instead of the MC living his life, many things happen that are not explained in depth or they just happen and that's it, We could say that there are many timeskips and many sudden jumps are made in which too many important things happen and they are simply left in oblivion. There is also the problem that the secondary consciousness that he left behind is almost never spoken to, This causes many things to be emitted. In the character design part, it is quite poorly planned, the League of Legends characters almost NEVER speak, they are rarely mentioned and very rarely can it be said that they exist, For example, as far as I go in the story, Lulu spoke at the beginning and never said anything again other than a few times her spells, Of the yordles, those who have never spoken are: Teemo, Tristana, Rumble, Fizz, then Heimerdinger has spoken only once in the entire story in just one chapter. Something very similar happens with Ionia, there are almost never any mentions and they have only spoken about: Sett Yone Ahri and Karma, Karma also only in 1 chapter, it is assumed that Demacia already exists but only Quinn has appeared. I feel that in that department too much was left to be desired, the characters exist just for the sake of existing and they hardly matter in the slightest. At least the updates are decent, it's a shame that the chapters are relatively short but you understand why. Yes, I recommend reading this fanfic, but don't expect much from League of Legends, almost nothing from there.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Do I even have to say anything?. Just look at the top fans to know what I think of this work..
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love it but are you lazy seeker on patreon if yes great but if no im going to have to report for theft
This was 5/5 to me. The concept was good and refreshing, the MC start as a God which is new for me. Anyway it's good and refreshing fanfic. Keep translating, translator-san, thanks😉👍
This is greate fan-fic. I recommend this norval to one who want to see system based god family making in the world of Danmachi.
Goooooooooood Danmachi novel. I'm waiting for the champions of Demacia to appear, Lux and Vayne especially. I liked that he saved Alfia, he always seemed like a character that deserved screen time and I'm waiting for him to interact with Bell
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Its very interesting concept and I like how the familia is getting together but its little too fast with bringing peaple from lol.
The fan novel is quite good and manages to highlight some pretty good implementations. It quite naturally combines elements of Danmachi and Valorant, introducing unusual dynamics that change the previously existing environment. This fusion is not only interesting. Definitely a recommended read.
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Let me be the first to give this a 5-star rating! This story is unlike any other Danmachi fanfic you've read because our MC is a god—definitely a rare concept. His children are heroes from the Valoran continent, which is based on the game League of Legends. But don’t worry! Even if you’re unfamiliar with the game, you’ll still enjoy reading this. Every character and place from the game comes with corresponding images to help you visualize what we’re talking about. That said, you can only fully enjoy this on my Patreon page since Webnovel doesn’t support the image integration. Don’t worry, though—it’s completely free!